Harley spec spot

Re: Harley spec spot

something's wrong, i think -- i could only play until the middle of each clip -- to where the guy says, hey, where're you goin' -- then it's SCRATCH CITY -- ow, my ears...

but the first half was good -- well written -- i'd get a different voice over guy though -- he (maybe you, i'm sorry if it is) wasn't all that good...

cheers
 
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Yep, that's me! Ha! No worries. Some people really like my voice, others really, really don't. I think my lack of smoking and drinking is a detriment to my non-existent VO career.

Don't know why the file flaked out on you, though. Just a standard quicktime.

Fox
 
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Voice over was fine. Sounded like you were going for the EA Sports "if it's in the game..." style.

Liked it.
 
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I smoke and drink a lot and I can't stand my voice. ;D

I always get asked where I got my accent and I'm always like, 'what flippin' accent?'

Tight and fun. One advice to throw out there (because I do believe in constructive criticism, that's what helps right? if everyone just loves it, where do we learn- from our enemies...) is the product should be shown in a tighter shot once. I realize that at this point everyone knows what a harley is and they market 'a way of life' as nike did in the late 80s with just the swoosh symbol and 'just do it' logo but their products are always large and visible.

Even one of the Harley commercial where a guy checking out someone else's harley and tries to pick up a chick, the harley is shown again and again in close up. I suppose the old board guys like to see the product...

The other is, the saturation, brightness and contrast seemed to be off on the wide reaction shot of the family across the street. Was that intentional? Cheers for writing something and following through!!! Keep it up.

P.S. haha, loved the voice over. but you tried to throw you voice deeper in all announcer, natural is better no? lol but still loved it.
 
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Not to say anything should be changed but perhaps one closer tight shot after the reveal from around the corner of the house of the guy on bike would be enough.
 
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Thanks to all who've responded.

The shot of the neighbors is way off because the talent shot that later with his own, cheap minidv cam at full zoom -- I had to use a stabilizer plug in. The talent just happens to be the exec producer at the agency I work at. The house is his -- moved the family to a new build on the outskirts of the burbs (to much taunting). Anyway, the shots of the "taupe utopia" homes were also done by him, but I managed to match them a little better.

In the real land of commercials, I doubt the client would've let the spot go by without a product close-up. But they might as their sound is as much a signature as anything else they have.

Also, the exposures didn't match on half of the shots (my fault), which you hopefully can't tell without close examination.

Now if I can just buy a freakin' DVX and learn to use it I'll be in business.

Fox
 
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Nice! Just a few "constructive comments":

Voice was pretty good - maybe just a bit too much "rattle" in it.

On editing - I felt you could tighten up the "flow" of the video a bit (i.e. match images a little better to your dialogue). For example when you say ".....suburban life," maybe reveal the entire scene (like wide shot of all the houses on the street) at that point.

Also in the final shot, after the bike goes out of frame to the left, I think it should drive away from the camera, and eventually show up in the little stretch of street that you have at the extreme left of the frame (before fading out). Also would've been cool (well, maybe a bit cheesy) to have the sun break out of the clouds on the left of the frame as the biker rode away..... heheh.
 
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[quote author=AJ link=board=Clips;num=1100580386;start=0#9 date=11/16/04 at 14:18:32]
On editing - I felt you could tighten up the "flow" of the video a bit (i.e. match images a little better to your dialogue).  For example when you say ".....suburban life," maybe reveal the entire scene (like wide shot of all the houses on the street)  at that point.
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Yeah I agree. More "see and say" would make it a bit more effective.
 
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fixed the issue -- for some reason it worked when i downloaded it (he save as: right click method) --

very nice commercial -- suggestions on the voice, if i may? ;D the current VO reminds me too much of the miller lite commercials where the old man replaces golf balls for beer cans...

i think it might be better, going along with your taunting theme if the voice matched a guy who would appreciate a harley when he saw one, and would naturally be disdainful of the suburban lifestyle --

my last 2 cents, i promise
good flippin work tho'
cheers
 
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Again, thanks to everyone for responding.

Let's see here:

1. I work at Bernstein-Rein in Kansas City. Shhhhh, don't tell them what I'm doing. ;D

2. Contrary to my usual MO, I shot this without a script. So shots I may have liked to have in the edit just weren't there. This all came together rather quickly in the "hey, wouldn't it be cool if..." vein.

3. Yeah, it is reminiscent of the High Life campaign, which is one of my favorite campaigns of all time. Sadly, I could not get Sam Eliot to do the VO, which might have helped distinguish it a bit. Now, if I'd gotten Doug Jeffers (the High Life voice), it would've seemed like a total rip-off. Audio really is 49% of the spot. At least that's what the sound guys tell me.

Fox
 
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