"Hair-trigger"

[Brandon Rice]

Scriptfest III

A Moment. A Life.​

 

[Noel Evans]

Cmon Rice man wheres your banner.

 

[Brandon Rice]

Sorry... no banner for my script got a little tag though.

 

[Nektonic]

I like the title. Is this going to have a good dose of action? Maybe a gangster story?

 

[Brandon Rice]

It certainly intersects some crime sectors... and yeah, it's got a fair bit of action, I'd say

 

[Nektonic]

Action is good. I'll have to make sure I pee before I read this so I don't get too excited.

 

[pauly_the_hitman]

Cool tag line man...I hope it is as good as I think it will be.
Pauly

 

[Brandon Rice]

Finished draft 3 this morning

 

[Brandon Rice]

After playing around with some different ideas on this script, I think I'm going to end up with the original outline... in draft 3 form.

 

[Russell Moore]

Really like the title and tag.

 

[Brandon Rice]

the title may change by the time I upload tonight.... since I saw one person had "trigger finger"

 

[Noel Evans]

Not sure Id be too bothered. Looking forward to reading it.

 

[Brandon Rice]

just finished uploading... title remained the same.

 

[preston]

hey Brandon, i'm looking forward to reading your script... good luck, man.

 

[Brandon Rice]

Thanks preston! Same to you.

 

[Horncastle]

I'm glad you entered - it will be good to read a script of yours. Good luck.
Jason

 

[MiataFilmSomething]

Can't wait! Sounds like it has the potential to be a lot of things.

 

[krestofre]

Nice. Well structured, well written. I don't know that there's anything I'd change about it.

 

[Mike Manning]

What up Brandon...
I agree.. it's well structured... but I guess I'm left wondering... why did you write this film? What are you trying to say with it?

It feels like it's been done before... the hitman's last job... the target being a loved one... having to choose... etc. etc.

..and while the theme of this fest wants us to play with the cliches of pulp fiction, that doesn't mean we can't expand on them and make them our own.

I dunno.. I hope I'm not sounding like a snob.

 

[Brandon Rice]

Nice. Well structured, well written. I don't know that there's anything I'd change about it.

Thanks man! :beer:

What up Brandon...
I agree.. it's well structured... but I guess I'm left wondering... why did you write this film? What are you trying to say with it?

It feels like it's been done before... the hitman's last job... the target being a loved one... having to choose... etc. etc.

..and while the theme of this fest wants us to play with the cliches of pulp fiction, that doesn't mean we can't expand on them and make them our own.

I dunno.. I hope I'm not sounding like a snob.

Hm. good questions... why did I write it? Well, because I thought it was a cool story of sacrifice that had a lot of tension in it, that could be easily fit and structured into a short.

I hope the theme of sacrifice comes through in the script, that's truly all I wanted to come through. And hopefully have some tension throughout.

I felt like this was a nice diversion from a lot of typical "pulp" stuff I had seen...

Thanks for your comments!