SHORT: Forbidden Alliance (Action/SciFi)

[itsDavidAbraham]

My first completed scene from "Project ETi" which a series I'm using to teach myself filmmaking.

Camera is Sony NX5U,
onboard mic (yes, I know)
Shot in my house in NJ
Edited in Final Cut Pro X (which I love)

 

[dre83]

the sound... you know....

the acting is less I find

good things is you didn't fill it up with music for 7minutes, some shots were ok but take care what's in the frame every detail counts.
For example 2:34 I'm distracted by the plants. 1:01, nice kitchen...oh ok, I have to watch them...