First Short, Please Critique!

Your intro credits are waayy too long. try cutting it in half to 1 minute to 30 seconds. You broke continuity rule. But other than that i really like it. Good story good directing. Fairly good audio. Decent lighting. Very good first step to the very very very long road of filmmakers.
 
OK you actually broke almost every rule in the book......within the first 30 seconds. The first shot(steadycam) is followed by a shot on sticks from almost the exact same shot size and angle. It's a jump cut. Then the next shot you jump across but at the same size and angle, real jarring, cut to close up maybe, then back out if need be. The restaurant scene the lady is way to centered in her MS. Acting wasn't the greatest, ADR wasn't either, but to ADR a whole 20 minutes must be tough.

Oh and your opening is more like 2 minutes, waaaaaaay too long, cut to maybe 30 seconds.

All constructive criticism aside. I commend you for gathering the people and resources to do this. I also thought there were some good parts in here, some things I could definitely learn from. Definitely keep at it and you will do great things.
 
Thanks for the feedback. I was hoping to get more feedback since over 100 view and only 3 responses. Yes we lost a little of the acting due to the fact we got bad audio on set(too much echo, did not use sound blankets, did not know what they were at the time of the shoot). So we had to ADR the whole thing. They did not have what they had on set in the booth. The credits are way too long. Lesson learned. Hope to get some more feedback.
 
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