First DVX project

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Snowspot

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Hey guys, I've actually just been checking out the forum for a few weeks. I recieved a DVX as an early birthday present about a week ago, mainly because I have this final film project for my production class and it needs to get done. I wanted to show off what I've shot here. Take note though, I've never actually shot anything before this (yeah I know, weird for a film student) and I've only actually owned the dvx for a week or two. I wanted to know what people thought.

Thanks guys... I'm sure this will kill my websites bandwith.

http://www.snowspot.net/films/final project-Sequence 1.mp4

*EDIT* I'm sorry, I forgot to mention that this is just a few clips from it, the narration isn't complete yet and it won't make very much sense yet. I just want to know if what I'm doing looks decent. Also, I have no crew.

PS I know some of the acting isn't very good.

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OK, quick question, I seem to be noticing interlacing issues on this (if I'm correct in what I think interlacing is), I set the shutter speed to 1/60 then later on when I was scared it might create interlacing issues, I set it to 1/48... Now I'm kinda confused, all the footage seems the same. I shot in 24p mode and I'm wondering, is that obvious?
 
The dialog between the boy and the girl, next time make sure that you stay on one side of the axis, so that they really talk to each other.
 
The Audio stinks. It's all over the place. the music is nice, rich, and full of dynamic range. the dialogue track is weak, and sounds tin-ey, and is full of ambient background noise. were you using the on-board mic? I'd suggest using a shotgun, if you ahve one available,

JKL is right about breaking the 180 rule. it's distracting. also the flow of your cuts could use a little better timing. there's almost no reaction from the guy when she yells at him that she's not Japanese... he just looks like "oh, yeah... " not like "Oh, i offended her." the cut lingers on her too long, like she's waiting for a response from him.


Also, the opening scene, there are some serious continuity errors with the joint. i'd suggest taking some focus off the guy on the bed, and intercut his roommate a little earlier. the way the roommate is revealed suggests that the dude in the chair is the same guy in the bed. if you show the guy in bed, then cut to the guy in the chair right after that, and have them interact, share the joint from the beginning, that takes care of your character reveal, and clans up some of the continuity errors with the joint.

When i heard that guy say "Dude, you okay?" i thought "Who the hell is in the room with him?"

Happy Editing!
 
Definitley get a shotgun mic. It's a priceless necessity. If your audio sucks your video will suck even if it was shot on film. As for the first scene. You can't drag that guy sitting around for a whole minute. I lose interest and I make films, so someone who is not critiquing your work will lose interest even faster. Also to make your shots more interesting, experiment with lighting. Get a couple of scoops (lights with the metal bowl-like housing), cheap, and experiment. You may be able to get away with no lighting on the outdoor shots but for indoor, your sure to get a homemade whitout any additional lighting. I learned by looking up lighting techniques for filming in online tutorials and got awesome info. Now I even light my outdoor shots! The more you know the better your film will get so If you haven’t got it yet, also read Barry Green's DVXbook it's a wealth of info, from camera settings to accessories you'll learn everything your camera has to offer. I am very blunt, but only in the hopes that I can help you take it to the next level and I also did like the second scene where he's trying to make her run into the tree. I thought it was funny and your guy was a pretty good actor, he looked comfortable and natural. So keep it up cause all you can do is learn and get better. I look forward to seeing more from you!
 
FunkyDragon said:
The Audio stinks. It's all over the place. the music is nice, rich, and full of dynamic range. the dialogue track is weak, and sounds tin-ey, and is full of ambient background noise. were you using the on-board mic? I'd suggest using a shotgun, if you ahve one available,

JKL is right about breaking the 180 rule. it's distracting. also the flow of your cuts could use a little better timing. there's almost no reaction from the guy when she yells at him that she's not Japanese... he just looks like "oh, yeah... " not like "Oh, i offended her." the cut lingers on her too long, like she's waiting for a response from him.


Also, the opening scene, there are some serious continuity errors with the joint. i'd suggest taking some focus off the guy on the bed, and intercut his roommate a little earlier. the way the roommate is revealed suggests that the dude in the chair is the same guy in the bed. if you show the guy in bed, then cut to the guy in the chair right after that, and have them interact, share the joint from the beginning, that takes care of your character reveal, and clans up some of the continuity errors with the joint.

When i heard that guy say "Dude, you okay?" i thought "Who the hell is in the room with him?"

Happy Editing!
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Man I wish I had a shotgun mic. School of Visual Arts, the school I attend, doesn't let freshmen take out shotgun mic's or even boom mic's. I realized the continuity errors with the joint scene but I think it's because I got so little coverage, since it was the first time I shot with the camera. Thanks for the suggestions though, really appreciated, I'll probably re-edit that scene now.
 
I just need to tell you Snowspot, that you have the perfect attitude. I have seen many people put clips up on the site and when faced with not so positive critiques, they get all defensive and say they shouldnt have put it up or ask why everyone is so mean.
Keep working on it. It looks like it could be really funny.
I actually liked the character's (you?) reaction when she said she was from Tai Wan, it looked like he really didnt care. Made me laugh.

Anyway, mainly just wanted to say that I thought it was really cool that you were able to positivley take all the critiques.

Cheers:)
-Justin
 
Justin said:
I actually liked the character's (you?) reaction when she said she was from Tai Wan, it looked like he really didnt care. Made me laugh.
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Yeah, exactly. If he did care about her, he wouldn't try to be making her run into a tree. :)
 
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