Fighting For Richter

[Justin_Kirch]

Hey guys, this is a project I've been working on for awhile now. We're still trying to get funding for it, like everyone else, but we already have a demo made and a little website up with a blog and the demo reel on it.

www.fightingforrichter.com

Here's the poster:

There's some AE shots in the demo. It's about 10 minutes long.

 

[Justin_Kirch]

Feel free to give me feedback.

 

[Demistate]

The music is wonderful. It feel very cinematic.

However your video needs some improvements to match up with the music.

At the beginning the sound and music really create a good mood to get you into. However when your male character starts talking to the female, there need to be inserts, closeups and possibly a pan down of what he's looking at. If you dont want to reveal what he's looking at (Becuase of story) you could use abstract closeup shots. It just feels akward watching his face for so long. (nice take though)

The color grading is good. It covers up the fact that there weren't many lights (if any used at all at least for that one shot.)

The text leaves something to be desired. Of course making text intresting is one of the most difficult jobs that you can possibly do. Find someone who is tallented with making text on screen intresting, just to add to the cinmea quality of your film.

ADR the audio in the car scene. Consistant audio is totally necesasary to keep the focous on the story, and not on the fact that its obvious you just planted a camera on the car dashboard.

More of an establishing shot of the two fighters would be appropriate. You just had a a pretty intensive scene right before in the car. Closeups and fast cuts of the boxers pushing and punching each other, accomidated by good sound will really create the feeling that these two guys are sparing, as well as that they are trained amateurs. (maybe semi-pro)

You'll probablly need to ADR the shot inside the gym as well, I hear pops from the background audio.

During the montage where the character is training, you should have comments from his buddy to keep pushing him on. Think back to the training montage in Batman Begins for a good example. So you have a few shots, and then a portion where you slow down to show a good example of training, and the "master" gives advice on how he'll become a better fighter.

I wouldn't use any long shots on the scene where he's dropping the rose on the grave. You want to keep this scene as intimate as possible.

Nice ending to close it up Just like a trailer.


I know that alot of my comments are harsh, but you should hold your self to high standards if you have alerady put this much time into a project. You have a lot of potential to do really well. I would start looking for a distrobuter, Maybe they can hook you up with a professional post-produciton house and alot of these things can be done for you

Good luck.

 

[Nogert]

The trailer is nice I can't give critisism because i'm not very good but i was just woundering why there was some sort of static when they spoke ? was it the microphone just not that good ?

 

[Justin_Kirch]

thanks for the feedback guys.......the static shots were because i was acting in it too...i was the tall guy, not to mention the DP. trust me, if i could have had it any different i would have done better shots. i thought what i did was good considering no one was behind the camera.