Experimental One Minute Short

I realize this is experimental, so as such it will speak to some people and not others strictly on what we bring to it (I think). What I mean is, there is no context in which to process the images and sounds being thrown at us. So, from a content perspective, it didn't really do much for me.
I agree that it's interesting...there is something there, but I didn't feel like it really delivered for me. It seems to want to build or culminate to something (I say that it 'seems to' because that's what I got from the audio and the editing) but I didn't really 'feel' that build up.

It's difficult to give feedback on experimental pieces because it's hard to know exactly what you were trying to achieve. Whereas with a narrative piece it's much easier to tell someone "well, I was confused by this" or "this part didn't make sense to me" I'm not sure what sort of sense you originally intended this piece to have.

What I can tell you is that it seems as though you want the audience to have some sort of emotional or visceral response to this, and it didn't really do that for me. The last shot made me feel exactly the same as the first shot.

From a technical standpoint, I thought your use of audio was good. The shots, while interesting, didn't seem as dynamic as they could have been with some better lighting. The lighting seems a bit flat at times (shot of the gun for example), and the lighting scheme overall didn't really gel to create a look or feel for the piece overall. I'm not saying that every shot should be lit in the same style, but they should definitely work together in some way in my opinion.

Not sure if this is the kind of feedback you were looking for...like I said it's tough to give feedback on experimental pieces, but hopefully this helps in some way.
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That was certainly an interesting montage of images. I like the look of a lot of the shots, I just don't know that it added up to anything for me.

Chris
 
As already stated, you have some really nice images and lots of potential to work with... what you're going for will really help if you're wanting to make your piece better...

The shot that you have of the actor laughing(CU) I would also include a shot where he's laughing histerically at something he's seeing (where we get to see what he's looking at)...whether it's the static, the girl on tv, or something that an ordinary person wouldn't necesarilly be laughing at... my 2 cents.

Lot's of potential. Keep working it.

SmithHouse
 
Basically, we just wanted to make something out of this sound bite. Not quite a music video, not quite a short. To try and make something with an erie feel to it, hence, the dark shots and shadows. It's the second thing we've shot with the DVX, so the main point of all this is to have a learning experience.

As for what feedback I'm looking for, I embrace all forms. Positive and negative. A negative comment is only negative if you percieve it to be.
 
Great images and audio that together make a very interesting film piece. I think that it needed to be more frantic toward the end, more images, more cuts, it seems like the audio falls apart and becomes repetitive (a good thing) I was expecting the images to do likewise, I wanted faster cuts, more images, maybe more disturbing images or some un identifiable images at the end. Then that split second of calm as he raises the gun. Great idea for a piece, I love expirments!

yaso
 
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