DVC30 clip/commercial for school.

Pretty nice, man. Elegant in its simplicity...

Other then the obvious mispelling of "Then", I only had a few critiques I had to get off my chest.

1. A particularly "warm" shot interrupts the pattern of cool colors. You could resolve that by either altering the warm shot, or making the last shot ("Art can be film") warm. I'd recommend the latter.
2. For the "You should join film club" text montage (I really don't know what else you'd call it), you might want to try justifying all the text to the right, then adjust each line as necessary, to create an inverted stacking half-pyramid.
3. Finally, some of the text came just a tad too quickly for my eyes. Remember that, as an editor, you've watched it countless times, so its already registered in your brain. For everyone else, just give them a tad longer.

Room 317, eh? Count me in. Our video club has to meet in the library. (eyugh)
 
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