Jon Starr
Veteran
Cool stuff. Personally I like the washed out look and don't think it looks over exposed. I do see the information where it's needed. It's exposed nicely, just blown out for aesthetic purposes, and I like the over all look/style. The people that think it's over-exposed just don't like the look, simple as that.
One thing that bugs me is that you're shooting very filmic, using a red, yet the special effects don't do it justice. The two day to night shots (fake time lapse shots) really didn't look convincing. With the street lamp I was just paying attention to this strange light coming from the street lamp and I didn't realize it had gotten dark. Then the same with the house time lapse, all I was paying attention to was the way the house was cut out to replace the sky behind it.
Lastly, the radar, aside from it being strange that the car was technically coming towards the radar (which I guess means that there's a radar station ahead of the car?), it looked a bit off, especially with the look you have going. Just a simple square monitor with a dark (close to black) map and a red dot on it moving would have worked a lot more convincinly, and felt more like a tracker rather than a radar station in the middle of the city.
As for story, it's okay. It's tickled my interest, but I'm not holding on saying "what's going to happen next!?" I think the problem is that I don't know who this guy is, and thus, don't really care for his survival, and I'm not inclinded to put myself into his shoes.
Now this is a web series, and we can't bore audiences with... well... time. So what should have been done is that his character gets revealed through the actions of the story right from the begining. It should have come out through how he treats his sister, or his parents, or his friend. Also, right now it just feels like he's just riding along with the story rather than shaping it.
Anyways, it's looking good. Hope to see more!
One thing that bugs me is that you're shooting very filmic, using a red, yet the special effects don't do it justice. The two day to night shots (fake time lapse shots) really didn't look convincing. With the street lamp I was just paying attention to this strange light coming from the street lamp and I didn't realize it had gotten dark. Then the same with the house time lapse, all I was paying attention to was the way the house was cut out to replace the sky behind it.
Lastly, the radar, aside from it being strange that the car was technically coming towards the radar (which I guess means that there's a radar station ahead of the car?), it looked a bit off, especially with the look you have going. Just a simple square monitor with a dark (close to black) map and a red dot on it moving would have worked a lot more convincinly, and felt more like a tracker rather than a radar station in the middle of the city.
As for story, it's okay. It's tickled my interest, but I'm not holding on saying "what's going to happen next!?" I think the problem is that I don't know who this guy is, and thus, don't really care for his survival, and I'm not inclinded to put myself into his shoes.
Now this is a web series, and we can't bore audiences with... well... time. So what should have been done is that his character gets revealed through the actions of the story right from the begining. It should have come out through how he treats his sister, or his parents, or his friend. Also, right now it just feels like he's just riding along with the story rather than shaping it.
Anyways, it's looking good. Hope to see more!