"Crippled"

There's not a whole lot to say about 3 pictures (2 of which are pretty similar). Maybe you can start by talking about your equipment (camera, lighting, audio, post...), any problems you encountered, anything you learned throughout production, etc.

Maybe even post a copy of the script for review. I don't know how much having the WGA copyright protects you.
 
ikander said:
It doesn't.
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Actually, having a script registered with the WGA will give you something to go off if you ever need to launch a suit against someone for copyright infringement. However, even a copyright registered with the Library of Congress won't protect the idea or premise behind the script, only the specific execution.

That said, I don't recommend posting your script online until the film is complete, unless the script means nothing to you if stolen. Especially for a short film, as you're not going to want to break your bank for a 10-page script, when you could just as easily write another script and break your bank trying to produce it.

In response to the original topic, as WildTrackDave said, there's not really a whole lot to say. The premise is cliché, but still interesting enough that if I thought the execution would be handled well, I would watch the final product.

The screen grabs are hard to judge. The first is easily the best. The second is really soft. The third has some weird motion blur going on with his hand that I wouldn't recommend for a screen grab, and half the subject's face is cut off by the top of the frame.

The colors are a bit too... graded. Too saturated and unrealistic. If I had to guess, I'd bet that you pulled the low tones hard to blue and the high tones hard to orange/yellow. It's all too common among indie films these days, especially since Michael Bay and a few other big H-wood directors decided to do it.

That said, the lighting is good, especially in the middle shot with the light pouring in from behind them.
 
I'll be honest I stopped watching after 4 minutes.

Please don't do a feature yet. Keep doing shorts and master your technique
 
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