comment or critique

[chris grieder]

this is a rough cut for my entry to a 24 second skate video contest. i used a home made jib and dolly for some shots, its the panasonic share the air contest. My mom went bankrupt and im hoping my entry will win so i can suprise her with some cash.

http://media.putfile.com/share-the-air-rough-cut

lemme know what you think

 

[chris grieder]

im also going to have my friend re-do the v.o because when i went over the voiceovers they were all a little mumbly.