"Canada"

I was confused as to why the kids wanted to go to Canada and I feel I shouldn't have been confused on this point. Good idea, I liked the dialog a lot. Things didnt have to be fed to me, but I just think the way Canada was being portrayed was alittle confusing. Is it a haven and sanctuary or is Canada at war? And if so, with whom? Good read overall.
 
This on page 2 ...

Time has changed

Shouldn't that be 'times have changed'

This on page 4 ...

What if this those are bandits?​

What?

Story

Lot of trouble following what exactly was happening. My take is this ...

The radio sets up that somebody, probably Americans, are expressing their distaste for Canada, while at the very same time violence has completely annihilated up any vestige of freedom in the US.

Yet, national pride blinds them to the fact the country to the north actually has what American claims it has. Father finally comes around to realizing maybe it's time to bail.

Did I get it? If so, certainly plausible.

alex
 
maybe you already explained this...so sorry if I am repeating another question or observation...but I am confused w/ the concept of the dad wanting to move to Canada at the end when the beginning was set up to insinuate that we were sort of at war w/ Canada or invading Canada...I read a few of the posts and responses but I am still unsure of the ending and how it relates to the beginning feel of the story. Overall I think it was great dialogue and it was a fun read! ;-)
 
Propaganda. All they hear is how terrible Canada is but don't believe it. Even the father, who WANTS to believe it, doesn't, and instead does what's best for his family -- which is how he grows as a character.
 
Great job overall. No real problems or complaints. A bit heavy on the dialogue and less action than I originally expected, but it works. If anything this makes your script one of the more character driven in the fest. I think the near future semi-apocalyptic world you created was interesting from the little bit of it that we get to see. Characters of Robert and Debbie were well developed. The whole thing about them growing their own food and having to be armed whenever going outside seems eerily prescient with all the mounting problems of today’s world. Who knows, this could be what life is like ten or fifteen years from now if everything goes down the toilet. I would like to see more of this world and the impending war with Canada.
 
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