SHORT: Bun In The Oven (New Comedy Web Series) - Episode 1

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pieceofweirk

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Hey guys,

I created a comedy webseries - Bun In The Oven - about a bakery owner who tries to sell his employee's baby. After a lot of hard work, the first episode has finally been released! Check it out, and share with your peeps if you like :)


 
It moves too slow, but I like where it's going.

Comedy like this really works a ton better when it's delivered and edited at a much quicker pace.

I like the set and the colors.

Also - MUSIC!
If there was ever a piece that screamed for a great music bed it's this one. Especially the intro section!

If you want GREAT examples of how to move your dialog, action, and edits along much quicker for good comedic effect - watch a few episodes of season one, two, or three of M*A*S*H*. THAT is masters at work.
You can stream it on Netflix.

I'd say this first episode would be made much better even by just adding music.

Carry on!
 
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