Osteed Grenn
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8gTPyyiMWIc&feature=related
Movie made in 36 hours for the Guerilla Film Contest.
GH2 un-hacked
Movie made in 36 hours for the Guerilla Film Contest.
GH2 un-hacked
GH2 Benjamin Likes (short film with GH2)
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William_Robinette
Shallow Member
Not bad at all for a 36 hour endeavor!
SPOILERS!
Some of his posts are downright hilarious. The one after he reaches for his wife's hand at the kitchen table was the first really good one I think. The subsequent ones are good too, "going up in an elevator," and "patience is a virtue" are both great as well. I think the whole piece would benefit from a bit of cutting a bit though. The opening of the getting ready for work routine is a bit played out. I really liked the way you opened and the effect of the floating text coming from is phone is clever and a great way to get through that routine without it seeming "play out," (I wish you kept that aesthetic for every post though, with the picture and feedback stats!). If that was what the editing revolved around, rather then just shots showing him doing something and then every two or three cuts a "post" is sprinkled in I think it would be a) shorter in a good way & b) more unique.
The whole "got ya" is the fact that his wife left him because of his addiction to social media, right? So why don't we see more of her presence in the film? Doesn't have to be her physically on-screen but she needs to be there somehow. The first two minutes had me thinking he was a single bachelor.
I thought the actor had just the right amount of quirky to make this work well and I liked him a lot. The wife did come off a little "goth sister" for some reason. Perhaps it was the cigarette and attitude but she didn't seem enough above him" for the end to play out, you know?
Overall though great, great job for such a short amount of time. Well done and it did hold my interest all the way through, but I think a 3 minute cut would be just that much stronger.
*Also just a suggestion, but the 10 seconds of black you have between the title card and the first video we see is going to kill your views on YouTube. It's sad, but 10 seconds isn't a luxury we have anymore when opening a film online.
SPOILERS!
Some of his posts are downright hilarious. The one after he reaches for his wife's hand at the kitchen table was the first really good one I think. The subsequent ones are good too, "going up in an elevator," and "patience is a virtue" are both great as well. I think the whole piece would benefit from a bit of cutting a bit though. The opening of the getting ready for work routine is a bit played out. I really liked the way you opened and the effect of the floating text coming from is phone is clever and a great way to get through that routine without it seeming "play out," (I wish you kept that aesthetic for every post though, with the picture and feedback stats!). If that was what the editing revolved around, rather then just shots showing him doing something and then every two or three cuts a "post" is sprinkled in I think it would be a) shorter in a good way & b) more unique.
The whole "got ya" is the fact that his wife left him because of his addiction to social media, right? So why don't we see more of her presence in the film? Doesn't have to be her physically on-screen but she needs to be there somehow. The first two minutes had me thinking he was a single bachelor.
I thought the actor had just the right amount of quirky to make this work well and I liked him a lot. The wife did come off a little "goth sister" for some reason. Perhaps it was the cigarette and attitude but she didn't seem enough above him" for the end to play out, you know?
Overall though great, great job for such a short amount of time. Well done and it did hold my interest all the way through, but I think a 3 minute cut would be just that much stronger.
*Also just a suggestion, but the 10 seconds of black you have between the title card and the first video we see is going to kill your views on YouTube. It's sad, but 10 seconds isn't a luxury we have anymore when opening a film online.
Osteed Grenn
Member
Thanks for your input William. Very informative and useful.