Another Man's Dame

alex whitmer

alex whitmer

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Another Man's Dame​

She was from the future, he was from the past. Somewhere in between is the only thing she ever loved.​






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i'm looking forward to Another Man's Dame. well that doesn't sound quite right, but you know what i mean...

good luck Alex. :)
 
Good to see you here Alex (NOT!) how about giving the rest of us a chance? I kid, I kid. Good luck. Look forward to reading.
 
Just read it. I really liked this. It had great slang usage, (if I ever need anyone to help me with the 40's slang, I'll contact you Alex) and there is a genuinely hilarious moment that I could see Jim Carrey or someone similar playing the part. The script moved along at a nice breezy pace. Good flow.

I was thinking that there could be more confilct, but this has such a fun and zany feel to it, I like it the way it is. Sometimes you don't need things to be so dire to make a story work, especially in a short form.

Good job man. I think everyone is going to enjoy this one.
 
I liked it too. It kind of had a William S. Burroughs beat feel to it.

That's all I've got for now. I'm tired. Maybe I'll post more later. :)
 
Hey man, I liked this one. Really weird.. good characters.. as mentioned above, could benefit from more conflict. But yeah man, I dug it!
 
Mr. Whitmer would need to convince me that could be called an automobile.

Great job! (but that's NOT and automobile!)
 
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