A short film about looking for a cigarette

[nathanpizzle]

The story is kinda stupid.

Was kinda just a mess around video. All thought up and shot on the same day.

Would be cool to see what you guys think. Pointers and tips would be nice.

http://vimeo.com/6903524

 

[wgzn]

i couldnt get beyond the dude wearing girl pants.

 

[Matt Hoss.]

Nice shots and editing. I liked the whole thing except you didn't have an interesting ending.

I would recommend that you get rid of the subtitles. You've done a good job as a filmmaker and made it visually very clear what's going on, making the subtitles redundant and distracting.

 

[ZazaCast]

i couldnt get beyond the dude wearing girl pants.

LMAO!

Sorry, but that and the choice of music had me jumping ship after a few seconds...

 

[nathanpizzle]

Nice shots and editing. I liked the whole thing except you didn't have an interesting ending.

I would recommend that you get rid of the subtitles. You've done a good job as a filmmaker and made it visually very clear what's going on, making the subtitles redundant and distracting.

Ahh thanks man. Yeah I could see how the subtitles could be distracting.

Again this wasn't like a serious film or anything. Kinda lost interest while making it and was originally going to scrap it but then decided to just put together what I could to see how it would come out.

Mostly just practice some cinematography and smooth editing skills.

As far as the cloths....this is how everyone in the film actually normally dresses. Maybe in the future I will try to be fashionably correct in my films.....Maybe this is more fashionable? http://vimeo.com/6123338

 

[DGW]

Overall looked pretty good. Like the B&W.