briceman "A Price Too High"

Ought2bCommitted said:
Hey Brice.

I haven't read previous posts, so I'm sorry if you've heard it before...

I liked the concept overall. Interesting premise, and executed fairly well.

I liked the blood effect and the sniper rifle pov was nice. Good job there!

What I didn't like was the lead's acting. Felt very forced and well, acty.
The sound when the friend is killed was a little off as well. The music was a little too loud perhaps and the gunshot didn't resonate with me as being real.

The sniper actor was fairly solid though. Believeable. Nice job there.

In the end what kept me out of the movie was that I didn't buy your lead actress and therefore didn't care so much about her fate.

Nice work! Great job overall!

Robert
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Thanks a ton for your comment dude! I realized I missed replying to this one. I am sorry you didn't feel for the lead character. It's so hard to really develop her character in 6 min. We did what we could :) Thanks for the comment! :dankk2:
 
If anyone is interested in reading the original script for the film, I have put a link up for it on the first page.
 
As the girl ran into the warehouse and touched the door I was disappointed not to see blood on it after she had touched it. I thought the acting was pretty good, especially by the 'gunman' .

I also enjoyed the music.
 
iSTy said:
As the girl ran into the warehouse and touched the door I was disappointed not to see blood on it after she had touched it. I thought the acting was pretty good, especially by the 'gunman' .

I also enjoyed the music.
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Very happy you liked the acting and music! I really enjoy the music a lot too, and think it fits the piece perfectly! Thanks for watching our film! :dankk2:
 
g0ldenb0y55 said:
Thanks for the shout out Briceman! It was nothing. Glad I was able to help a brotha out!

Your Sci-Fi Short seems to be very popular! Congrats!
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Thanks Goldenboy! I hope people have been enjoying the film! :)
 
While there is no way that I could rank this film among the worst of the fest, it is very far from being one of the best.

Technically, I have no major qualms with this project. In general, the lighting, cinematography, and editing all seemed to flow fairly seemlessly. The audio was weak in a few points, and the score was just okay...but overall, the technical aspects were decent.

A highlight would have to be the shot when she is hiding in the Warehouse...that shot was dead on awesome.

The story however, had some pretty big holes that I can not forgive. There were many points during the film when I was like "WTF!" Things just did not add up for me. And while I have been blessed with a fairly massive willfull suspension of disbelief, there were a few things that I just fould not buy.

- How did the assassin's bosses learn about the girl and her powers?

-Why would they want her dead if she is so powerful...wouldn't they want to try to bring her into their organization?

- If the assassin was sent to kill the girl, why didn't he shoot her after he shot her friend? He already messed up, why not finish the job while he had a clear shot?

-Why didn't the girl save her friend's life? (of course this question assumes that the friend was left to die...I couldn't tell from the film whether the girl was brought back to life...if she was, this was something else that wasn't made clear enough)

-Why does the girl go back to save the assassin? HE'S TRYING TO KILL YOU! RUN *****, RUN!

- If the assassin is trying to keep her locked away, why would he just toss her file into a public trash can. And not just any trash can...but an open waste basket! Dude, at least use a trash can with a flippin' lid!

Beyond the story though, this film also lacked something on the side of acting. I just could not connect with them. And by the time the film was over...I was more than willing, even borderline excited, to be saying farewell.

And that's all I have to say about that.
 
Captain KickAss said:
While there is no way that I could rank this film among the worst of the fest, it is very far from being one of the best.

Technically, I have no major qualms with this project. In general, the lighting, cinematography, and editing all seemed to flow fairly seemlessly. The audio was weak in a few points, and the score was just okay...but overall, the technical aspects were decent.

A highlight would have to be the shot when she is hiding in the Warehouse...that shot was dead on awesome.

The story however, had some pretty big holes that I can not forgive. There were many points during the film when I was like "WTF!" Things just did not add up for me. And while I have been blessed with a fairly massive willfull suspension of disbelief, there were a few things that I just fould not buy.

- How did the assassin's bosses learn about the girl and her powers?

-Why would they want her dead if she is so powerful...wouldn't they want to try to bring her into their organization?

- If the assassin was sent to kill the girl, why didn't he shoot her after he shot her friend? He already messed up, why not finish the job while he had a clear shot?

-Why didn't the girl save her friend's life? (of course this question assumes that the friend was left to die...I couldn't tell from the film whether the girl was brought back to life...if she was, this was something else that wasn't made clear enough)

-Why does the girl go back to save the assassin? HE'S TRYING TO KILL YOU! RUN *****, RUN!

- If the assassin is trying to keep her locked away, why would he just toss her file into a public trash can. And not just any trash can...but an open waste basket! Dude, at least use a trash can with a flippin' lid!

Beyond the story though, this film also lacked something on the side of acting. I just could not connect with them. And by the time the film was over...I was more than willing, even borderline excited, to be saying farewell.

And that's all I have to say about that.
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Thanks for the post. Some of these questions I think don't need answering (How did the guy find out about her power?), and some do (Why didn't she save the friend?). She did save the friend, unfortunantly in the shortened version, it's hard to convey. It is much clearer in the extended cut (11 min). Also, the girl's backstory is shown in the extended cut, so it shows us that this girl cares about people. And, she has a moral dilema at the end, to run or save him. She chooses what is right, to save him. Also, at the end, sorry you didn't like the trash thing. It's a picture, a metaphor of the girl's life never being the same again. Once again, in the extended cut, it's a much better ending, I won't go into detail, but I'll leave it at that. Thanks for saying it's not the worst film in the fest! And, for watching our movie!!! Cheers!:dankk2:
 
More of a specific question for those of you who have watched the film. For the most part did the editing flow for you? Did you ever feel there was an awkward cut in the film? I feel editing is one of the most major things in film and I try to continually perfect my methods, so some constructive ideas on that area would be excellent! :) thanks.
 
The only visibly awkward cut I noticed was the transition to the warehouse chase. I'm guessing there was a small sequence in there which is in your longer cut?

Anyway, just got done watching it again. It's very replayable. :)
 
dj200423 said:
The only visibly awkward cut I noticed was the transition to the warehouse chase. I'm guessing there was a small sequence in there which is in your longer cut?

Anyway, just got done watching it again. It's very replayable. :)
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Thanks man! Yeah, there is a lot that got cut there, of the assasin actually entering the building (opening the door and walking in, cocking gun, etc.) Dang, can't wait to show the longer version!! :) Good job on noticing that weird transition!
 
I used to think my computer was quite fast, either that or I'm just impatient ;)
ah well, I'll go and put the kettle on.
You were in my top 10 briceman :)
 
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