briceman "A Price Too High"

Hope you enjoyed our before/after photos. We're in the midst of finishing up a nice little BTS documentary piece for the film.
 
Personally, I liked this film.
At first, as in from the start, it really grips us.
Not like some others that take forever go get to the story.
Do you know what I mean?
Of course you do.
Really a great flick to watch!
A must see!

I call this one, "Mr. Subliminal". It's like, "Hey, how much is that free coke over there?" Um, it's free? Really? Thanks!

Think I'll throw this little gem in Jack's thread too. I'd do it to others, but not sure they could handle the ribbing. :)
 
Someone provoked me to tell people why I used the little bar to skip through pieces.

So, I picked the first .rar archive I opened, and the first one I saw--

It was "A Price too High".

I take criticism well. In fact, I take the bad better than I take the good. But, I don't know how other people take it. So, Brice/Brandon... here are the things that make me not want to watch your short again.

1. Bad acting
2. Boring exposition
3. Way too long for the content
4. Uninteresting Dialogue
5. Ending

I didn't elaborate on cases because, frankly, I don't like giving criticism to works I think are bad. I'm almost afraid to. I love when someone slices writing to pieces, but I wouldn't be a good person to talk to if the work is bad. If it's good.. .well, it just makes it easy. =P
 
Wow thanks... I think I'll have a dandy day after reading that. Glad you enjoyed our film so much :) So much in fact you didn't eleborate on your very few critiscisms.
 
That sounds like you want me to elaborate.. Okay!

1> Bad Acting: From the beginning, nearly every actor forced lines and action. When she's dancing in the mirror? Yeah, that looks really forced. Then you move to the guy that's supposed to be a psychiatrist? I couldn't tell. Did he forget his lines? It continues throughout... Rodriguez took a few too many dramatic pauses a.k.a beats. There's one good one though, the brother. But then again, it's hard to find good actors with a small budget.

2> Boring Exposition: The events that lead up to the ending just weren't strong enough. Maybe it wasn't Boring? But it just wasn't so interesting.

3> Way too long for the content: It was stretched. You could've taken out a good two minutes and still had the same effect. Five minutes is way too long for the content to me. There wasn't enough to take up five minutes of screen time.

4> Uninteresting Dialogue: Real doctors don't talk like that. Neither do covert operatives trying to put a bullet into someone's head. He's mad that he missed his shot? Now he has one and he wants to monologue? Err.

5> Ending: Cliche. Cliche is good sometimes, but, well.. i dunno. I guess some people expect too much. I slapped myself on the hand for you.

No offense meant. But I do agree with what I was told in another thread. I should comment on what I didn't like to see if it helps someone. If it doesn't, well, that's fine too.
 
Oh and by the way-- A+ for effort. I really do wish, every day, that I could just get up and make a short, ANY short... so that I had something to show. Everyone who entered really should be proud of their perseverance; it's what sets them apart from everyone else.
 
Well sir, I respect your comments. When they are this negative though, I just have to simply respond with saying this film was not meant for you. Obviously you don't enjoy it at all, and I am fine with that. I think many other people on this board have enjoyed the film, and have felt it had some merit. I must say I totally disagree on the cliche ending though. If I wanted to have a cliche ending, I would have done another scene and had the agent walk into the room and shoot the girl. That would have been cliche. Anyway, all I have to say is that apparently you were not my target audience. Thanks.
 
I don't know if having her head plugged would've been cliche, more like "trying"... but whatever. I won't say anything more about your work.

Like I said, A+ for having something more than I do. But, I have no other pats on the back, regardless of who might think I should. I only hope someone's just as forward with me when I finally put my words where my eyes are.
 
Hey Briceman-

I enjoyed watching your flick. You did a really nice job presenting something that was appropriate to the 6 minute time limit, in that you told a complete, coherent story. (That said, I would still like to see your longer cut :))

I have to say I didn't mind the shrink's acting that much. The acting was pretty solid across the board. The ONLY thing that really bothered me was the dialogue in the warehouse, which was ULTRA cheesy. I think the two characters bandied the word "power" back and forth about 6 times.

Oh, and I did not quite get the ending. Was the shrink doing the girl a favor by throwing her file away? If he was trying to do her a favor, why did he turn her in in the first place? I know I missed something here. Forgive me if it's totally obvious. Or if you've explained it already. :) You don't have to reply specifically to this post, I just wanted to give you my viewing impressions. I did watch it twice, but it was a few days ago.

Overall, really solid job! Good luck on your next project.
 
Very happy you enjoyed the film! As far as the ending goes. It's not a button ending that a lot of films have. It leaves a little up to the audience to imagine what could happen. It's a picture really... when that file goes into the trash... it's supposed to show that the girl's life is over, as she knew it before. Anyway, I think the longer version shows more of what I mean. Thanks again for the comment!
 
Hey Briceman,

You can't please them all... I can also say that the world doesn't revolve around Kholi's comments/criticsim. You did a fine job with your short film and I hope to see more of your projects in the future.
 
g0ldenb0y55 said:
Hey Briceman,

You can't please them all... I can also say that the world doesn't revolve around Kholi's comments/criticsim. You did a fine job with your short film and I hope to see more of your projects in the future.
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Thanks man. I can't try to please everyone. I have to make film's that I enjoy, and hope other people do too :) Thanks for the encouragment.
 
g0ldenb0y55 said:
Hey Briceman,

You can't please them all... I can also say that the world doesn't revolve around Kholi's comments/criticsim. You did a fine job with your short film and I hope to see more of your projects in the future.
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See what happens when you state your opinion and the reasons behind it? You get people like this taking stabs at your "opinion".

Pft. And others on this board wonder why they don't get comments.

Brice took his criticism well. He didn't need you to jump in and pat his back. He's a man, I'd like to think.
 
Ok, Kholi, I don't think he was stabbing your opinion. I think he simply meant I cannot please all people. Which I realize. And, I respect your opinion on the film, as much as I respect Goldenboy's opinion.
 
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