"Time In A Bottle"- A film by Robbie and Kegan

2nd rounds ...

The acting really is excellent all around. Only one line came across as stilted, and that was the bit about space suits. Otherwise, well done, and well directed.

I especially like the shot of the girls standing up as they face each other at the 2:07 mark.

Nice detail on using the green scarf to make it clear who we were seeing after 20 yrs (still not convinced you needed to super that).

Vast improvement over past fests.

Only two blips on detail, one I already mentioned about the ashes - paper bag and not nearly enough. Also, this round I see she drops the bag on the ground with a thud. Hardly seems respectful, assuming some of her friend is still in there??

The other blip is a jar buried for 20 years would have a rusty top that would be a bear to unscrew. Looked good as new.

Details matter!

Color is real nice on the two girls. Will make for some gorgeous screen grabs.

I'm sure the writer is pleased.

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Hey Alex, I know you're a talented person so I thank you for the review! A second one as well...I'm assuming you're doing that for everyone?

vnguyen972 said:
Watched this and i was moved by it. Very good job at that... The kids are awesome and the grown up character is beautiful... I think it's definitely one of my favorite so far! I was pulled into the story itself that i didn't pay any attention to the technical parts... there maybe nothing for me to look for anyway! Great job man!
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Like hearing that it's your favorite! Makes me wanna make another film bro.

Robbie
 
Kept me interested till the end, which is good. Very predictable. Wasn't a story (in my opinion) - we weren't allowed to predict or wonder how things would develop.

But the young girls' acting skills were strong enough to keep me watching till the end.

Congratulations.
 
I've never done it but it seems like it can be a little tricker to work with younger people. Granted, their not little little kids but still. It worked well and they gave storng performances. The grown woman did as well. Very good composition on your shots. For me, it was rather refreshing to see flashbacks with rich color and present day more washed out for a change. Thought it was an added compliment to the film. Good work!
 
Really impressed with this Robbie! By far your best work. The acting is great, and the film is emotional without pushing too hard.

Some lovely shots. Like the color timing of the different time periods. Ironically I did a similar thing in my film.

I would have liked a close-up on the paper bag, perhaps right after the very first shot of the movie, before we flash back. I didn't notice the bag at first, and so I didn't have the question in my mind of what was in it. You want to make sure you have a clear set up so that the pay off works properly.

The sound was very good. I especially liked the echoey effect on the singing when heard in the present. The only problem I had at all, and I don't know what would have improved it, was the sound as they crossed the bridge. It just had a weird quality to it.

I would have to say that the thing that really stood out to me here was the performances. Very very strong.

This is a great entry Robbie, and one that fully embraces the theme.
 
Hey man, I'm pretty sure I commented on your film, but I loved yours!

Thanks for the comment, and you gave me mostly positive feedback which is good.

I hear ya out on the bridge quality. While editing, I thought it sounded funny from the rest of the films audio.

My first time hiring a sound guy, and I give props to him cause I thought he did an excellent job, and I'll be using him for future projects!

Thanks for the comments everyone!

Robbie
 
Robbie, I thought this was a nice film, but I could have done without the voice over and the shot at the end of the little girls disappearing. Both of those elements were just reiterating points that the movie has already made (the other girls is dead, their youth is gone), and I guess I just felt like it would have been stronger without them. As a viewer, I don't need to be told everything, you know?

The photography in the flashbacks was really nice, but it felt a little flat to me in the present day scenes. I did like the way you graded the different bits though. Nice job overall.
 
Nice film! I like how this came out.

I would have liked to see a bit more of a connection that the jar came out of the ground. I understand the ground was frozen solid, but even a heap of soil from the nursery suggesting it had been dug would have been enough. As it was, pawing at the frozen ground with her mittened hand and then having the jar was not convincing.

I liked the fadeout over the bridge at the end. Not sure the swing pushing scene really added much. Maybe those seconds could have been used in some other way. Didn't detract, just didn't really add anything for me.

Score was great, composition of shots was really nice
 
Hey! Very impressed by this - congrats to everyone - a really solid little film that did a good job avoiding the potential for cheesiness. Strong performances and great sound add depth and that score is fantastic! Very glad you didn't use my song in the end - wouldn't have stood up alongside Herman's work at all.

Basically well done - a solid springboard to future successes! Should a springboard be solid? Oh never mind...great job!!!! :)
 
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