Joystick Films Presents..."Foresight"

Maximus said:
Great job! You've got some really great shots in this. My favorites are the basketball player stuff - very pro looking. The idea was very good and certainly fit the theme. The acting was a little uneven. The psycho was good, but his victim wasn't very believable. The girl in the bar was very good. She has real screen presence, and you should consider making your next film with her in the lead. :beer:
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Thanks for the input! I have Used Tyiesha (bar girl) in every one of my films so far...(all 2 of them:)) I like her. I am still not a good director of actor performance because I am doing everything on set. Thank you for checking it out and giving me your honest opinion.
 
good film!

liked the idea and the twist at the end. the above poster is right, the actress at the end is awesome! the lead is good too, was twitchy and nervous. don't get why he was carrying a bottle of water to the garage door though. would rather see more of him wandering around being haunted by different people dying. cool idea. would also be cool if he was also calling people before they died too. that would add to the twist at the end - he's calling people, trying to warn them- they don't listen - all the while he is being called and he doesn't listen.

nice work, i like the black and white too. great shots of people dying in the beginning too, especially the dude with a mouthful of foam, ugh! best shot of dead person award!
 
hoz said:
good film!

liked the idea and the twist at the end. the above poster is right, the actress at the end is awesome! the lead is good too, was twitchy and nervous. don't get why he was carrying a bottle of water to the garage door though. would rather see more of him wandering around being haunted by different people dying. cool idea. would also be cool if he was also calling people before they died too. that would add to the twist at the end - he's calling people, trying to warn them- they don't listen - all the while he is being called and he doesn't listen.

nice work, i like the black and white too. great shots of people dying in the beginning too, especially the dude with a mouthful of foam, ugh! best shot of dead person award!
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Thanks for checking it out. The water thing was just something that he always had. I got more into it in the first cut which kept coming in at 9 minutes. I never thought about having him call anyone but that could have worked as well. thanks about the guy in the garage, He has an entire death scene where he Overdoses on Crack. I show him smoking rocks and all that. :Drogar-Evil(DBG): But it would not fit into the 6 minutes. once the fest is over I will do a director's cut for anyone that wants to see it. Thanks again. I may PM you on some of your lighting technique.:beer:
 
good acting. I'm not a fan of slasher stories, but this had a nice twist, especially the way each chose to use their gift. however, thought the B&W didn't work. wasn't lit well for that and was kinda flat.
 
Dick Campbell said:
good acting. I'm not a fan of slasher stories, but this had a nice twist, especially the way each chose to use their gift. however, thought the B&W didn't work. wasn't lit well for that and was kinda flat.
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Thanks for checking it out! I really did not know you had to light a specific way for B&W. I do now because your film looked fantastic. thanks again.
 
Overall i liked it, the story was good and interesting. I think you could have gotten more out of the actress getting killed in the beginning, I think there would be a lot more screaming when being killed, but who knows. Good job though!
 
I liked your concept and the twist ending. Your editing was cool too, especially in those flashy sequences. The B&W worked out well and gave a Zoney feeling to it. I got what you were going for with the story (I think) but it could've been a little clearer. Nice Job.
 
yeehaanow said:
I liked your concept and the twist ending. Your editing was cool too, especially in those flashy sequences. The B&W worked out well and gave a Zoney feeling to it. I got what you were going for with the story (I think) but it could've been a little clearer. Nice Job.
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Thank you for the input!
 
Hey man,

Just caught the flick. I really really liked it. The black and white looked really really nice. Nice lighting and locations. A good variety of locations too. I really liked that.

I though the acting was very good as well. Maybe a little too many expletives in the script but otherwise, I enjoyed the way the cast delivered it. Not sure there was enough panic or fear or whatever emotion you would have before you get cut up but I think your actress there seemed kind of calm for that happening to her. Her movements didn't seem erratic enough either and there didn't seem to be much of a struggle from her to get away or anything like that.

I really liked the story on this one. I thought the twist could have been plotted out a little better. I liked the twist, I just wish there was more that we could see of it. It just seems a little random that he would end up in the bar that she's in if she can see his death. And doesn't he see it earlier? Or does he think he's going there to see her die? It becomes a little vague because he should be able to see his own death, shouldn't he?

Otherwise I liked the story and the ideas behind it. And it looked nice so very nice work. Looking forward to more in the future.
 
Great observations. Thanks for checking it out. The critiques are the best learning tools.:beer:


Danielleus said:
Hey man,

Just caught the flick. I really really liked it. The black and white looked really really nice. Nice lighting and locations. A good variety of locations too. I really liked that.

I though the acting was very good as well. Maybe a little too many expletives in the script but otherwise, I enjoyed the way the cast delivered it. Not sure there was enough panic or fear or whatever emotion you would have before you get cut up but I think your actress there seemed kind of calm for that happening to her. Her movements didn't seem erratic enough either and there didn't seem to be much of a struggle from her to get away or anything like that.

I really liked the story on this one. I thought the twist could have been plotted out a little better. I liked the twist, I just wish there was more that we could see of it. It just seems a little random that he would end up in the bar that she's in if she can see his death. And doesn't he see it earlier? Or does he think he's going there to see her die? It becomes a little vague because he should be able to see his own death, shouldn't he?

Otherwise I liked the story and the ideas behind it. And it looked nice so very nice work. Looking forward to more in the future.
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yeehaanow said:
I liked your concept and the twist ending. Your editing was cool too, especially in those flashy sequences. The B&W worked out well and gave a Zoney feeling to it. I got what you were going for with the story (I think) but it could've been a little clearer. Nice Job.
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I think most people kind of understood what is was about. I need to learn that just because I write it, understand it, it does not mean everyone else will. But I have to make them understand through good storytelling. I'm still learning and can't wait for the next fest. :dankk2:
 
Nice film. Good concept, good acting and I like the B&W. Also really like how you hold on that two shot in the bar with the man and girl... You let the performances carry the scene for the most part rather just getting tons of coverage. I like the twist with the girl. Nicely done! Thanks for sharing.
 
Thanks for the comments!

Geoff_R said:
Nice film. Good concept, good acting and I like the B&W. Also really like how you hold on that two shot in the bar with the man and girl... You let the performances carry the scene for the most part rather just getting tons of coverage. I like the twist with the girl. Nicely done! Thanks for sharing.
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