Need a serious sexist line.

lordybob

lordybob

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Writing a thriller set out at some lighthouses (popular bike route).

The scene is:

two girls stop biking for a break/ flat tire. As they are on the road a sexist man and his wife bike past and the sexist man yells something sexist (but not too over the top, serious now) at the girls, then his wife apologizes for him as they bike past.

I'm looking for that sexist comment! As i can think of none!

Could be to do with bikes or something.

Cheers.
 
Nice melons, you both could make a fruit salad.

You look like you have a flat rack.

Botox butts.

I got some "air" for your "tires."
 
Cheers for the ideas. I need to gather some options and test them out with the actor. Should be fun. Keep them coming!
 
I'm confused. What's the motivation for the man's sexist remark? Obviously it's not that he doesn't think women should be biking -- after all, his own wife is biking with him, right? (Besides, it would be a bit stupid to think biking is strictly a man's activity.)

Is it that he assumes two women together are lesbians? That doesn't really make much sense either.

I'm just having a hard time understanding the reality of the situation. If I could get a grasp of that, I might be able to come up with a decent sexist remark. Any help?
 
Ok. Motivation. At first I thought: The girls would be riding along and be in his way, and he would yell something sexist which would shock them out of the way, ( one of the girls then relates the sexist couple to her own boyfriend troubles) Yes lesbian was discussed but no, no if we want actors.

Any ideas for conflict?

Awesome feedback so far!
 
'You girls want a ride. is out of the question then.

I think the one with: 'Use the air in your heads to fill the tire.....' was good.
 
I thought about this, and came up with some of the very same comments, including several lesbian comments. But it feels so awkward without proper motivation. Why is this man going to make a rude comment to them? What are they doing to provoke him? I really can't see this scenario playing out, without looking stupid.
 
Why are you looking so hard for a reason? People just do such things. Sees two good looking women, says comment. Nothing more to ad.

How they provoked him? Just being sexy. I think thats the main point about beeing a sexist ^^
 
Capt Quirk said:
I thought about this, and came up with some of the very same comments, including several lesbian comments. But it feels so awkward without proper motivation. Why is this man going to make a rude comment to them? What are they doing to provoke him? I really can't see this scenario playing out, without looking stupid.
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This post garners my 100% approval and agreement.

I honestly don't think this scene works. Dropping a random character in to speak a single, relatively unimportant line, and following it up by another random character (the wife) saying another unimportant line just isn't good scriptwriting.
 
Some people, not necessarily men now mind you, don't need a reason to exhibit a crass behavior, they just are one donut short of a dozen good sense (lol, okay, something like that).
 
ok. He isn't a random appearance. At the start of the film he is arguing with the wife in the background of the scene before the girls go off biking, and he watches them go off. Then when his wife is found dead in some bushes near the lighthouse and someone takes the girls bike. He is suspected (because of his sexist traits etc) by the girls as the man who killed her and is coming after them.

So you see. In the first scene "we" see the couple but the girls need an interaction with him to suspect him after the body is found. (By the way a similar murder was found out there in the 80's)
 
Can't it be something simple....like "don't break a nail, honey."....or something like that?
 
lordybob said:
ok. He isn't a random appearance. At the start of the film he is arguing with the wife in the background of the scene before the girls go off biking, and he watches them go off. Then when his wife is found dead in some bushes near the lighthouse and someone takes the girls bike. He is suspected (because of his sexist traits etc) by the girls as the man who killed her and is coming after them.

So you see. In the first scene "we" see the couple but the girls need an interaction with him to suspect him after the body is found. (By the way a similar murder was found out there in the 80's)
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If that's the direction you're going, he needs to show some kind of perceived aggrivation and/or negativism towards his wife, not the girls. Perhaps up the ante here, and rather than just a little arguement, it could go further. Perhaps he could use some sexist term that involves the girls ("you d*kes agree, right?"), but he should probably not just bark some random comment at them.

Now, of course, it could all just be a misunderstanding (which I assume it will be), and he loves her, but what they see needs to be related to his relationship with the wife, not with them.
 
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