Trailer for my new short Dupe

Cory Braun

Cory Braun

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I just made a trailer for my new short Dupe and I was wondering if you guys could provide me with some feedback. It's very short (only 20 seconds) but it can't be much longer because the movie will prob be in the 5-7 min range. This is my second project I have done with the DVX-100b.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6u0o4aWl-24&v2

Thanks,
Cory
 
Didn't work for me. I'm a fan of gore/slasher torture horror films, but this seemed just very generic. There was nothing compelling, nothing that said "hey, watch this, this is gonna be different, interesting, new, fresh". What really killed it for me, though was the quality of the voice of the woman narrator. It just seemed to me to describe what one can expect: amateur actors acting a generic scene. There was no creepy quality to the voice, no menace, no special inflection, no note of madness, nothing - just an amateur actress mouthing her lines. Pass.
 
Oh well lucky for you this isn't a horror film. The story is actually quite original (I didn't write it) but it's hard to describe without ruining anything (being a 5 min film). However, you are correct with the woman voice being an amateur actor, which of course is going to take away from the film.
 
Cory Braun said:
Oh well lucky for you this isn't a horror film.
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The trailer as is led me to believe it was a horror film too. Given the difficulty of doing a trailer for a 5 minute film, and considering that the current one may have a high probability of leading viewers to the wrong conclusion (that this is a horror film), maybe this is a case where you'd be better served promoting your film with some other device - like a well-conceived poster, perhaps?

Unless, of course, you just want the practice of doing a trailer.

Just a thought.

Matt
 
Cory Braun said:
Oh well lucky for you this isn't a horror film.
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In that case, you have a serious problem. The number 1 - numero uno - primo - most important info you need to convey in a trailer is: the genre. That's what audiences are looking for. If you mislead (intentionally or not) the audience, you'll just get a pissed off audience. Folks looking for a romantic comedy will not appreciate finding themselves watching a slasher movie, and the other way around. That is a fatal flaw in a trailer.

I'd say, if your genre is misrepresented in your trailer, you need to start over with the trailer.
 
muhkayoh said:
maybe this is a case where you'd be better served promoting your film with some other device - like a well-conceived poster, perhaps?

Unless, of course, you just want the practice of doing a trailer.
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That's a good idea. I kinda just wanted to make a trailer, but I may make a poster too.
 
I think I saw about less than 6 seconds worth of total footage. Not enough excitement for a trailer. The shots were fine but the pacing was very boring.
You need lots of quick action cuts. Remember, we as an audiance are jaded.
You have to excite us or at least keep our extremely poor attention span focused long enough to watch it as best you can.

For example while watching this the phones ringing, the kids are yellin, the ***** is a bitchin and I just knocked over my beer and dropped an ash off my cig down the side of the chair. I had to rewind this four times to see 6 seconds worth of actual shoot.

So, welcome.

Like I said the shots are fine, the post editing though needs a little work. Nothing you cant handle. Just make it more oooomph.
 
I think the lack of sound in the various impacts makes it less convincing. Nothing really gives you the impression that she's hitting him.
 
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