"J.U.L." Shaun Patrick/Stewbottum

Ian and RDragon,

Thanks for the comments. I'm glad you enjoyed the short.

We've actually had a lot of requests for the T-shirts and I believe the ones used in the film have already been given away. I didn't even get one.

In terms of the overmodulated dialogue...we weren't able to get the ADR done in time for the contest because of scheduling conflicts but we're planning on fixing it for future versions. Good eye on the clouds. I was hoping the explosion would distract most people from that...
 
I'm sure the director, Shaun, will have something to say about the blown-out audio on a few of Dad's outbursts, but we certainly are aware of that problem.

As for the wind, I guess there's a tunnel effect caused by the school structure, because that's the way the smoke moved when we set the explosives off. :)

...And I actually have one tee-shirt left. Maybe there will be an auction once we have the website set up. Prices could skyrocket to the high five and six dollars range.
 
WilderWorks said:
As for the wind, I guess there's a tunnel effect caused by the school structure, because that's the way the smoke moved when we set the explosives off. :)
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We lost a lot of good actors that day...
 
Screenwriter here, and I'm presently finishing up a short script around 15 - 20 minutes in length, a comedy with a little romance. Top secret, of course, still hush-hush, but maybe we'll be filming that come fall. Oh, and I'm doing the BTS for this, of course.

I know Benni (co-director) is finishing up a zombie short of about the same length (15 minutes), and is gonna have that ready for the October festivals. You can check out the info on that at www.misplacedplanet.com/antebellum

Thanks for asking!
 
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I'm working on my spec reel over the summer and, hopefully, producing some web commercials for some non-profits as well. Then in the fall we'll be gearing up for the romantic comedy WilderWorks mentioned above.

Again, thanks for the kind words PK.
 
Though I don't know if it will win in the votes, I'd say this movie is the top of all the entries.
Good pacing, nice shots.

The sound could have used more work.

And--something that a lot of the entries overlooked--the film's actually ABOUT something. Certainly one of the better scripts and really solid work by the actors to make that script work.

Also, it's always a good idea to show a little skin. I'm surprised no one else capitalized on that.
 
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Also, it's always a good idea to show a little skin. I'm surprised no one else capitalized on that.
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Always the secret weapon...:shakes head: I hope Laura Mulvey doesn't troll these boards...
 
Those are the secret weapons in my superhero belt: a point, a plot, and a pretty girl. I don't always keep them stocked, but I try.

And as a writer, I feel like the story, how it's told, and how the visuals serve it, often get starved for attention, while flashy fakes at badass get spoiled rotten. But the internet is a world where the plurals all get apostrophes, and the work of Len Wiseman can be sited as an artistic milestone... so what are we to do?

Thanks for commenting.
 
WilderWorks said:
But the internet is a world where the plurals all get apostrophes, and the work of Len Wiseman can be sited as an artistic milestone... so what are we to do?
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Dude, Len Weisman is awesome. Die Hard 4.0 is going to be off the hook. :shudders:

Anyway, I finally posted a proper credit list on our first page:

http://www.dvxuser.com/V6/showthread.php?t=59895

A huge thanks to the cast and crew on this one. The whole film was shot in one very long day and everyone brought their "A" game.
 
I'm really surprised this flick isn't getting more attention. In my mind this is the sleeper hit of the contest. It's perfect filmmaking and the only flick I consider flawless (other than a slight bump on one of the dolly shots). The performances were excellent, the score was excellent, the story was short and sweet, and there were some great lines. Sure, it doesn't have any big FX or visuals, but it is what it is, entertaining and original. Whether it wins or not, you should be proud.

Good luck.
 
WilderWorks said:
I feel like the story, how it's told, and how the visuals serve it, often get starved for attention, while flashy fakes at badass get spoiled rotten. But the internet is a world where the plurals all get apostrophes, and the work of Len Wiseman can be sited as an artistic milestone... so what are we to do?
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This is the best thing I've ever read on a forum.
 
Watched this one twice.

Pros - Some funny moments, and funny play on words. I liked the old "Superfriends" transitional shots, very cool.

Cons - The language seemed like it didn't fit and didnt' belong. The concept was cute, but it just didn't fly for me. I didn't really understand what the film was trying to do.

Overall - Fun to watch, and a unique addition to the fest!
 
Guys, amazing work. I have been watching the other films so closely like a uptight monkey with a stick up its arse... you guys blew my cover and had me rolling. Maybe its just my style of comedy, but I loved it. I know it's hard to make something that can truly make people laugh, but you did it all the way through.

The audio was already mentioned. I only noticed it in two spots. If there was more I was too busy laughing.

I agree with the earlier post about the language. I think that it would have been more effective if the dad just randomly blurted out one F-bomb. More striking maybe. Just my little opinion.

Camera work looked good. Steadi/dolly shots were nice touch. Acting was top notch and has my highest vote thus far.

I could go on and on. Loved it.
 
In response to MiataFilmSomething...

There's a certain kind of comedy that I particularly admire, where the main character is clearly in over his head, but he's totally convinced that he's got everything under control. That's Dad. He's overwhelmed by having to deal with his children, but he thinks he's got it in the bag, what with his superhero shirts. His outburst in the car is intended to demonstrate that he's really not on top of things -- cursing, shouting, and making empty threats is a sure sign that a parent isn't on the ball. So, I suppose that's the purpose and place of the language. To comically unmask him by going from one extreme (his sweetness and enthusiasm in the previous scene), to another extreme (his cliche, ridiculous threats and potty mouth in this scene).

However, I must be honest, it came so naturally in the writing, I was caught by surprise when several comments noted the "language." It certainly wasn't calculated; it just seemed right. So, while it certainly seemed appropriate to my experience with flustered parents, I understand if it isn't to the taste of some.

Sorry it didn't really speak to you, but thanks for watching, and thanks for the comments!
 
I see your point. It was just the only thing that didn't stick with me. And I mean only, because I though this was brilliant!!!
 
Glad you liked it, snodart! I'm a great lover of comedy, so I'm happy it made you laugh.

We're gonna get those sound problems fixed, hopefully in time for any possible Hero-Fest DVDs. It's no excuse, but the clock just ran out on us.

And I see what you're saying about the ol' F-bomb. And you know, had I known Marc (Dad) was going to be such a great actor, I might have removed all the cursing all together, since he can sell the point without it. ...But then again... I'm a deviant and find his total lack of self-control amusing. I mean, there's something to be said for the inherent comedy of cursing at children. :)

So, it's a tough call. Clearly something for me to think about.
 
Thanks for the comments MiataFilmSomething and Snodart!!!

There are definitely some kinks to work out sound wise (ADR and some additional mixing). Like WilderWorks said, we simply ran out of time in the end.

In terms of the language, I see your point but I think it works for the character of the father--being completely flustered/over his head and all. Marc really blew us away with his energy on set and the F-Bomb flowed so naturally out of his mouth. Something to think about, though.
 
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