im kinda new to script writing, i just want to hear some comments may it be bad or good it alright. :thumbsup:
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[B]EXT. – TRAIN STATION – NIGHT[/B]
11.30 In the morning, it is cold and foggy, Logan sitting on a vandalized concrete bench,
He looks worried, he then looks at his watch.
He whispers
[B]LOGAN[/B]
I hope he doesn’t show up?
He hears a loud rumbling sound coming from about 100 meters away; Logan looks and sees a red muscle car driving towards him, Logan looks very nervous. The car then stops in front of him with the window rolled down.
[B] JEFF[/B]
You got the stuff?
[B] LOGAN[/B][B] (stuttering)[/B]
Na man …
[B] JEFF (angry)[/B]
Where the hell is it?
[B] LOGAN[/B]
I’m sorry, I sold it.
[B] JEFF[/B]
What? Why the hell did you sell it?
Are you stupid or something?!
[B] LOGAN[/B]
Look, we can go get the stuff back from the guy
I know where he lives.
[B] JEFF[/B]
Well your coming with me, GET IN!
Logan opens the door and gets in the car.
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[B]INT. – CAR – NIGHT[/B]
Jeff drives down a dark and quiet road.
[B] JEFF [/B]
(Sounding very pissed off)
Where the hell does this guy live?
Logan then pops his head out the window, and points
[B] LOGAN[/B]
There he is, that’s him right there!
The guy walks out off his front door walking like a drunk, Jeff then slams on the break and reaches for his bat in the back seat looking very angry.
[B] JEFF [/B]
You better be sure.
[B]EXT. – STREET – NIGHT[/B]
Jeff then opens his door and walks up to the guy while Logan sitting in the car with his head out the window
[B] JEFF[/B]
HEY YOU!!!
The guy turns around and pulls a gold 45. Caliber gun out off his suit and aims it at Jeff,
Jeff then stops and drops his bat.
[B] GUY (drunk)[/B]
What do you want?
[B] JEFF [/B]
Uh, Nothing I was just wanted to ask if u got
Any cocaine?
the guy lowers his gun
[B] GUY[/B]
Well you’re asked the right guy.
He then walks towards Jeff.
[B] GUY[/B]
I just got these this morning.
[B] JEFF[/B]
Yeah I know who you got it from
Jeff then quickly bends down and picks up his bat and throws
It at the guy it hits him in the face. BANG! The guy then shoots Jeff.
Both fall.
Logan then scoots over to the driver side, turns the key and slams right on the accelerator
Leaving Jeff behind, the guy gets up and shoots at the car
ZOOMING OUT and FADING
[B]END[/B]