darkphoenix2x5
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Thanks for all the help guys. Back to the script for me.
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Script Assistance Needed
- Thread starter darkphoenix2x5
- Start date
ConspiracyPenguin
Nosey Penguin
Hey there, as a writer myself I can tell you have talent. I can honestly say, I did NOT see that twist coming! You are skilled at both wording and formatting, and I can really see this script going somewhere. While reading I felt as though I was really there and that is what good writing does for people. Let me know when you get this finished as I would love to read the final version, also feel free to ask for any help or advice. Keep up the good work!
darkphoenix2x5
New member
Thank you very much for the feedback. I appreciate you taking the time to read my script. I'm glad you liked it. I've never thought of myself as a good writer, I always try to get my friend to write scripts for me. Did you feel anything in particular needed to be changed? Any dialogue that needs to be worked out a bit better?
Shorten it. By the 19th page I think 1) more of the story should have unfolded and 2) We should know more about the characters.
Right now it's a some teenagers at a party, some typical boy girl stuff, then someone is attacked.
What you have here is about 3-5 pages of material. Not 19.
That's my opinion anyway.
Right now it's a some teenagers at a party, some typical boy girl stuff, then someone is attacked.
What you have here is about 3-5 pages of material. Not 19.
That's my opinion anyway.