School Promotion C/C

[remoteman]

Hi all,

Just wondered if i could get some input on a video that i did as a promotion for a school in England. I had never done anything like it before and was nineteen at the time so it was a good learning experience. Unfortunately the main abbey church was under reconstruction and the whole project got delayed by about eight months during which time i had to return to Australia, so i never got to finish the video for them. They have since replaced the video that mine was meant to replace, but i think it's still absolutely horrendous, which you can watch here:

[video=youtube;m0py1Y2-fys]http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_embedded&v=m0py1Y2-fys[/video]


Mine is here: (watch it in hd!)

There are loads of things that i'd like to change, particularly the interview with the headmaster, but oh well. Any comments on the cinematography/editing etc would be greatly appreciated.

Cheers,
Sean

 

[cylinder]

To me, they both have shortcomings. Theirs has that strange 80's washed out look, yours has the DSLR look. Their interviews are also lit.

In total, I prefer theirs for several reasons, mostly on the creative side.

Their video overall leans more on the academic/board school elements, whereas yours is more on the athletics. I watched yours first, skipping through before watching it entirely, and actually thought it was for a young country club, not a school. You click on 10 random frames in theirs, and you can get the jist it's a school.
Why do you have a race car sound? That's not connected to anything anywhere.
I like their music better. Yours sounds too tongue-in-cheek plingy for a regal presentation, although theirs is not a great example either.
Their video, the interviews seem to be more natural, less forced. And they had more people interviewed, which I think would help with a flow.
I like that you get the message across quicker... not sure why it took them 8 minutes.