Hey guys,
I recently wrapped my debut feature film and have been deep in editing lately for it. I've gotten to Scene 20/22 and after conferring with my collaborators on it, there's a scene I feel is vital to reshoot. It's in the first act of the film and while on a micro budget, it's not a scene I'd wanna leave it be due to cost. It's a crucial scene but want to get some feedback on additional ways to improve it and establish what I need to.
Scene: https://vimeo.com/88112480
password: warpath
The basic plot of the movie is about a contract killer Joel, a newly wed man who's about to go out on a job that will backfire on him in a major way and is about the fallout that happens as a result.
This scene is about 18 minutes in and is of him meeting with Elena, an ex-girlfriend who used to be a killer as well but after being cast out, acts as a low scale arms dealer. She shows up very briefly in the opening scenes but this is her first big dialogue scene. She's meant to be a strong female but with a vulnerable side, still harboring some feelings for him even though it's implied that he cheated on her (and married the next girlfriend he had, not long after). The vibe I wanna get from them is one of resentment, but also major implications of flirting and for it to feel like a cat and mouse game in a way. She shuts him out a bit when giving him back his gun. A big thing I felt I messed up on was having her sit down for a lot of the scene, making her look more submissive, when that doesn't jive with the character I want to portray.
Aside from just blocking, we're also reshooting it for a number of different reasons. A big reason you'll find is because of the audio, which was a victim of shooting in an actual hotel on a Friday night (BAD IDEA). Additionally, it was lit for night when it's meant to be afternoon, and just from the overall vibe of when we shot it. It was a full crew day and became chaos considering that there were just too many people in too small a space, so tempers were short and there was a big effort made to get us out ASAP, even though we hadn't even hit 10 hours. It was a scene the actors really wanted to reshoot as well as they didn't feel they got close to hitting their potential the first time around. The "same old song'n'dance" line was a big one I wanted to change around, plus get more coverage. Just a bad section all around.
Ideas on blocking, vibe, little things that'd help improve?
I recently wrapped my debut feature film and have been deep in editing lately for it. I've gotten to Scene 20/22 and after conferring with my collaborators on it, there's a scene I feel is vital to reshoot. It's in the first act of the film and while on a micro budget, it's not a scene I'd wanna leave it be due to cost. It's a crucial scene but want to get some feedback on additional ways to improve it and establish what I need to.
Scene: https://vimeo.com/88112480
password: warpath
The basic plot of the movie is about a contract killer Joel, a newly wed man who's about to go out on a job that will backfire on him in a major way and is about the fallout that happens as a result.
This scene is about 18 minutes in and is of him meeting with Elena, an ex-girlfriend who used to be a killer as well but after being cast out, acts as a low scale arms dealer. She shows up very briefly in the opening scenes but this is her first big dialogue scene. She's meant to be a strong female but with a vulnerable side, still harboring some feelings for him even though it's implied that he cheated on her (and married the next girlfriend he had, not long after). The vibe I wanna get from them is one of resentment, but also major implications of flirting and for it to feel like a cat and mouse game in a way. She shuts him out a bit when giving him back his gun. A big thing I felt I messed up on was having her sit down for a lot of the scene, making her look more submissive, when that doesn't jive with the character I want to portray.
Aside from just blocking, we're also reshooting it for a number of different reasons. A big reason you'll find is because of the audio, which was a victim of shooting in an actual hotel on a Friday night (BAD IDEA). Additionally, it was lit for night when it's meant to be afternoon, and just from the overall vibe of when we shot it. It was a full crew day and became chaos considering that there were just too many people in too small a space, so tempers were short and there was a big effort made to get us out ASAP, even though we hadn't even hit 10 hours. It was a scene the actors really wanted to reshoot as well as they didn't feel they got close to hitting their potential the first time around. The "same old song'n'dance" line was a big one I wanted to change around, plus get more coverage. Just a bad section all around.
Ideas on blocking, vibe, little things that'd help improve?