Please, help me with english!

petelms

petelms

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Hi.

I'm going to get my booklets printed soon for my first own DVD project and would like to have better&correct english for it. Is there anything that you would say with other words or anything you would correct? Are there any bad mistakes that should be corrected? Does something sound really silly? :huh: Indoor soccer is called futsal here. :beer:

Put any names instead of the X and you will be fine. :)

SPECIAL FEATURES

Inside X productions

This engrossing documentary takes you behind the scenes of the X.
For the first time we hear what really happens inside X productions and see rare interviews.
All this adds new layers of richness and significance to your enjoyment.
This documentary is a rare treat.

Outtakes

How hard and fun it can be to shoot a studio? That is what you will find out here.

Alternative beginning

To enrich your experience of X, director & producer X decided also to include
the alternative beginning of the project.

Interviews

Additional player interviews are also included in special features DVDs.

Goals!

X productions proudly presents almost every goal of the season 2005-2006.

7 games

Over 3 hours of futsal provided by X productions.
Commentary by X and X.

Thank you for your time. :dankk2:
 
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Just a quick scan for you.

Outtakes

How hard and fun it can be to shoot in a studio? Find out here.

Alternative beginning

To enrich your experience of X, director & producer X decided to include
the opening sequence of the project.

Interviews

Additional player interviews are also included on the special features DVD. (if two discs)

futsal>? Not sure what this is.

Hope it helps. Hard without much info.

J.P.
 
Thank you guys! Really helpful! Jpbankesmercer, I will make those changes, sounds so much better already. :)

Indoor soccer is called futsal here. :beer: Hmm...maybe I should change the whole word for something else...it is not english...
 
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For the first time we hear what really happens inside X productions and see rare interviews = With exclusive access and rare interviews, find out what really goes down inside X productions.

Your futsal thing. Just call it futsal and in parentheses (arena soccer) or (indoor football) or whatever.

Jason
 
Hey, Jason! Your sentence sounds soooo nice. I love it. Excellent. Couldn't help laughing when I read it for the first time, I find these kind of cool english sentences funny somehow, because my mother language is not english...maybe it's hard to understand...but anyway...thanks. :beer:

Damn, I feel so happy that I asked. :beer:
 
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