need writing advice

[Alexander McCoy]

i trying to write this screenplay that includes shots where the main character will do something that is actually in his mind(he's thinking about doing it) but i wanted it to be shown in the film. ex. he will get yelled at by a store clerk and he will yell at the clerk back, but then cut back to right before he yelled back at the clerk and he won't do it. kind of like he visions what he wants to do, but doesnt do it. anyway, i was wondering how i could write that? thank you.

 

[Billy Pilgrim]

There's different ways to approach it. I think the fight club screenply says something like "INT. JACK'S IMAGINATION" or something like that. The original screenplay for Pulp Fiction has a scene that was never filmed where Jules shoots imagines shooting pumpkin and honey-bunny. Maybe it could help:

PUMPKIN
I'm countin' to three, and if your hand ain't off that case, I'm gonna unload right in your face. Clear? One...

Jules closes his eyes.

...two...

Jules shoots pumpkin twice, up through the table, sending him to the floor. Whille still in the booth, he swings around to Honey Bunny, who has aimed at Jules, but slowed down by the shock of Pumpkin getting shot. He fires three times. Honey Bunny takes all three hits in the chest. As she falls screaming, she fires wildly, hitting a Surfer patron.

SURFER
She shot me! I'm dying! Sally! Sally!

Jules now brings the gun down to Pumpkin's face. Pumpkin lies shot on the floor at Jules' feet. Pumpkin looks up at the big gun.

JULES
Wrong guy, Ringo.

Jules fires straight at the camera, blinding us with his flash.

Jules eyes, still closed, suddenly open.

Pumpkin still stands, holding the gun on him.

PUMPKIN
...three.

JULES
You win.

So something like that could probably work in your case.

 

[Alexander McCoy]

thanks that really helps a lot.