Need critiques on 12 page script.

[STYLZ]

There needs to be a website dedicated to short scripts/screenplays. At any rate I'm looking for critiques on my short script. Download here.

http://www.uploadhut.com/id77637/NewsPhobia short.pdf

Thanks.

 

[Robbie Comeau]

How do i download it? I click that link that says Click Here To Download, but it doesn't do anything

 

[STYLZ]

Yeah my bad. You have to wait for countdown towards bottom of screen(in pink) click it, wait for another countdown.

My bad all.

 

[Robbie Comeau]

Hm, this is the first short script i have actually read the whole thing through. It kept me wanting to read. Dissapointing ending, i would change lol.

When mark says later alligator, there was a spelling error, im just telling you im not being critical haha.

Why was danny so weird talking? Like: "Ok, ya, ya, see ya, ok."

It was a good story!

 

[J.R. Hudson]

there was a spelling error, im just telling you im not being critical haha

That's funny.

 

[STYLZ]

Yea como, Danny is a bit of a wierdo. I actually know a guy who talks like that. Thanks for checking it out.

Anyone else check it out? Anyone else got something for me?

 

[STYLZ]

Noone else huh? Well does anyone know of another site where you can get constructive criticism on SHORT scripts?

 

[brianluce]

Noone else huh? Well does anyone know of another site where you can get constructive criticism on SHORT scripts?

I'm sorry but we only read and comment on TheComo's scripts.

 

[DeSica]

I'm sorry but we only read and comment on TheComo's scripts.

...and business cards, and website designs, and.....

 

[StefanHaynes]

Give me a bit.

I've downloaded it, but I have yet to look at it.

For the record, that upload site is absolutely horrible. I spent around 5min trying to figure out where the hell I was supposed to click and/or download from.

Use this instead. No waiting times or ads, and very easy to use.

 

[STYLZ]

StefanHaynes-Yeah. Lesson learned on that one. Sorry bout that.