My screenplay for class

[wjones717]

Hey guys some of you might have read my last script that i posted up on here awhile back, and i got some good feedback on it. I took the advise to use and hopefully this script will seem better organized (i think it is).

This time for film class we were told to write a 5-10 minute script, that we will then later on shoot and turn in for the final project. Take a look at what i came up with and feel free to respond. ANY ADVICE IS GREATLY APPRECIATED

Thanks everyone,


Will

 

[Randall_Oelerich]

Two thoughts

1. Google active and passive verb tense. You want to write active. Much to most of your writing is passive.
2. Write what the viewer can see or hear. E.g. I can not see someone agreeing, but I can see someone who nods in agreement, or I can hear someone who says "I agree."
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Writing is rewriting... randall

 

[wjones717]

Sweet i'll look through it again and fix the tense issues. its weird because i never thought i wrote in past, but i guess i get in to it and forget sometimes

Thanks for the advice Randall, always helpful


Will