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How's it sound? Interested?

After being accused of serial murder, a loner cop breaks out a jail to find the murderer himself by using an ability to see through the eyes of the killer.

Thoughts would be appreciated.
 
Why is he a cop? couldnt he be some random joeblow? I think it sounds intriguing. there is a typo "break out a jail" (although it reads like you were typing in dialect :P)

The fact that he is, himself, a cop just kinda makes me feel weird. what about:

After being accused of serial murder, a psych-ward nurse breaks out of jail to find the murderer himself by using an ability to see through the eyes of the killer.

And the fact that a movie has been made over 30 years ago with a simillar gimmick is irrelevant. At least irrelevant to stopping you from pursuing this idea.
 
Nice idea; how about (simple re-wording):

After being wrongly arrested for a series of brutal murders, a loner cop with the knack of being able to see through the eyes of a killer escapes custody to track down the real serial killer.
 
"A cop wrongfully accused of murder tries to find the real serial killer by seeing through the killer's eyes"
 
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