It looks ok on paper but will it fly?

Re: It looks ok on paper but will it fly?

more input.

going back and looking at it fresh again...it's still too busy for me. and there are too many vast open spaces with nothing going on, in contrast to smaller windows with too much happening. My eyes are jumping all over the page. There is no natural flow. I feel overwhelmed and want to leave instead of search the page for something to click. I think you could benefit from an introductory page first. Right now it feels like the cover of a National Enquirer.

I do like the more streamlined look of the FX page by the way.

Oh, one last thing. Spelling is a HUGE part of professionalism when advertising your wares. On the first page in the top center square in the faint type you can barely read, the word "Independent" is spelled incorrectly.

None of my comments are indended to sound harsh. I apologize if they are read that way.
 
Re: It looks ok on paper but will it fly?

Oh, and the "Do it by choice, not by force" doesn't count if someone is paying you to do it. ;D
 
Re: It looks ok on paper but will it fly?

Thanks Antomic...That was my whole point, The FX page is the only one that changed. Sorry, I thought I made that clear :-/
 
Re: It looks ok on paper but will it fly?

oh, you did. i know FX was the only change. i was just going back fresh and still affected by the site. sorry for not being more clear myself. ;)
 
Re: It looks ok on paper but will it fly?

It is now forbidden to look at anything but the FX page!







;D
 
Re: It looks ok on paper but will it fly?

Hey mino,

I've missed this thread.......been off on another journey...
...critique...usefull suggestions....
...I'm too novice....having read all the responses.....
(read most - glimpsed the rest)
You have gotten great replys!!!
....you probably know of my prejudice - thanks for dempsey

Bravo!

- BRM -
 
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