Kangaskhan
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This is written for a school assignment (I know, that's probably the worst reason to right a screenplay, huh?)
It's not very good. Due to deadlines, the storyline was forced, and I'm unsure of most of it even now. Due to inexperience, its not really formatted correctly and the dialogue of course is horrible.
If you chose to read it (and thank you! It's not very long, btw) keep these in mind:
-the dialogue will actually be in spanish
-I wrote it intending to direct it myself, therefore not everything is described
-Optimum length would be ~ 2 minutes
Synopsis:
It's sort of based on Don Quijote, but not at all. Basically, its an irrational person versus a rational person that was the assignment.
DREW is the cool kid at high school. He has tons of friends, and hangs out with them often. Then, a weird kid (MR. YTICIHC) shows up. This kid wears a nametag, refers to himself by the last name, has combed hair and dresses well. He seems completely oblivious. Taking it as a desire to join his group, DREW makes sure MR. Y. knows that he isn't cool enough for them.
When DREW goes up to ask an attractive girl out, feeling nothing but total confidence, her rejection is not the only thing that hurts when he must face reality.
link:
http://www.wikiupload.com/download_page.php?id=96453
I know its bad, but please do go ahead and rip it to pieces. you won't hurt my feelings. I can always rewrite the dialogue, so although all criticism is encouraged, I'd like it if I could get some suggestions for making the overall sequence of events smoother.
Oh, and its filmed on a horrible camera and horrible mic, with no cinementography skills, just so you know
spoiler:
at the end, if you didn't get it, Drew is having serious mental problems. Mr. Y is a social worker/assistant type guy who was hired by the school to keep track of him and help him with homework , etc. At the end, it is supposed to show that he really had no friends and was playing cards with imaginary people. The principal meets with Mr. Y to show that he is working for the school
It's not very good. Due to deadlines, the storyline was forced, and I'm unsure of most of it even now. Due to inexperience, its not really formatted correctly and the dialogue of course is horrible.
If you chose to read it (and thank you! It's not very long, btw) keep these in mind:
-the dialogue will actually be in spanish
-I wrote it intending to direct it myself, therefore not everything is described
-Optimum length would be ~ 2 minutes
Synopsis:
It's sort of based on Don Quijote, but not at all. Basically, its an irrational person versus a rational person that was the assignment.
DREW is the cool kid at high school. He has tons of friends, and hangs out with them often. Then, a weird kid (MR. YTICIHC) shows up. This kid wears a nametag, refers to himself by the last name, has combed hair and dresses well. He seems completely oblivious. Taking it as a desire to join his group, DREW makes sure MR. Y. knows that he isn't cool enough for them.
When DREW goes up to ask an attractive girl out, feeling nothing but total confidence, her rejection is not the only thing that hurts when he must face reality.
link:
http://www.wikiupload.com/download_page.php?id=96453
I know its bad, but please do go ahead and rip it to pieces. you won't hurt my feelings. I can always rewrite the dialogue, so although all criticism is encouraged, I'd like it if I could get some suggestions for making the overall sequence of events smoother.
Oh, and its filmed on a horrible camera and horrible mic, with no cinementography skills, just so you know
spoiler:
at the end, if you didn't get it, Drew is having serious mental problems. Mr. Y is a social worker/assistant type guy who was hired by the school to keep track of him and help him with homework , etc. At the end, it is supposed to show that he really had no friends and was playing cards with imaginary people. The principal meets with Mr. Y to show that he is working for the school
