Hello- will some of you be willing to read a full screenplay? :)

roei z

roei z

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i'm almost done translating my script to English.
(it's a feature i already shot, but got very bad opinions on the rough cut)
i really need as much criticism as possible cause i know the plot has some problems.
i also know it might not hold up as a feature.
i'll have to edit it and make it a shorter piece.
i now it won't be ideally written, because of the translation.
but i hope you'll have time and patience to help me on it, if you please.
again- i really need to hear every feedback, as bad as it may be.
i need to know if there's a GOOD POTENTIAL got me to keep on working on it.
i hope to come up with fresh ideas on completely editing and changing it's construction,
in order to 'save' it.

i hope it's not an impossible request :)
thanks for any interest and help.
i will upload the document in 1-2 days.
 
roei z said:
i'm almost done translating my script to English.
(it's a feature i already shot, but got very bad opinions on the rough cut)
i really need as much criticism as possible cause i know the plot has some problems.
i also know it might not hold up as a feature.
i'll have to edit it and make it a shorter piece.
i now it won't be ideally written, because of the translation.
but i hope you'll have time and patience to help me on it, if you please.
again- i really need to hear every feedback, as bad as it may be.
i need to know if there's a GOOD POTENTIAL got me to keep on working on it.
i hope to come up with fresh ideas on completely editing and changing it's construction,
in order to 'save' it.

i hope it's not an impossible request :)
thanks for any interest and help.
i will upload the document in 1-2 days.
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Post a link. There are other sites that are more dedicated to 'scripts' than this one, but since you are writer/director/cameraman/ace-go-for/misc... It probably is just as well to post here.
 
yea, i wanted to try it while writing in Hebrew but it didn't support it.
now i'll use it (does it auto correct btw?)

*ok, no need, thanks.
switched to Celtx.
needs a little re-adjustment but it looks nice :)
 
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just wanted to say,

i might be over my boundaries here, as i know that the deal these days is probably pay for a "script consultant",
and people don't just read scripts because i ask.

but i don't think i'm at that stage regarding this specific script (although i stupidly went and shot it ;) ).
so basically it's just whoever likes to read scripts, have an opinion on different and stranger ideas like in here,
or someone that who just wants to help, and interested in maybe resolving some problems i now have to face with the whole footage.

so before i make some final tunings, i should upload a link to a PDF file?

thanks!!
 
what's it about? I'll at least start looking at it, but can't guarantee I'll read the whole thing!

Hag sameach!
 
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