Graphic for a club, thoughts?

[SeanEmer]

I just made this graphic for my film production club at school, and was wondering if you guys had any thoughts on how to improve it. Thanks for any input!

note: ~3MB file. Stream or DL, whichever you prefer.

http://www.doodlesofamadman.com/video/HFC/Graphic.mov

 

[oneinfiniteloop]

The name "Hofstra Filmmaking Club" isn't up long enough to read. I would keep it up a little bit longer. The little triangle that comes out after that moves too slow. I would speed it up a bit. Also, I would spend some time in the curve editor tweaking those keyframes. Simple motion pieces like this live and die with good keyframing.

Also, think about layout a little. You can reinforce the piece by creating a good solid layout that will emphasize the various words.

Overall, a good start.

Overall, nice job, good for a loop that can play during events.