Digital Desert -- Shortfilm (Script feedback)

Darky Mikado

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Hey guys and gals!
A newcomer around these parts and been writing on a short script which I am directing. I feel the script is pretty much done but also thought it might be a great idea to let someone else butcher the piece first.
So, without further ado, here is some info and the attached script:
Tagline: [FONT=Adobe Fangsong Std R, serif]"In the void, two destinies connect. . ."[/FONT]
Genre:Drama
Synopsis:
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"Logicprogrammers.

That's what people called them. They created the most brilliantly conceived network in the world, a virtual playground where everyone was equal – something that was desperately needed in humanity's ever changing and difficult lifestyle. Dark is a logicprogrammer. He is also a nobody.

Dark has become disconnected from the network. In the mundane life that he surrounds himself in, Sarah exists. What is she? A person? Program? Sarah insists she is a person and that Dark must return with her to the network.
But Dark refuses to acknowledge her beyond anything more than a happy coincidence of the network's programming. Thrilling, humorous and dark events are to be expected as two destinies connect..."
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Shooting goes off in a week, so be sure to read it and get me that butchering before then! :kali:
Wish me luck! ... and be nice! Like this --> :nads:
 

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I opened your PDF of your script to take a look. But I immediately saw your pages numbers were in reverse. Hmm?
 
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'Darky Mikado' is a great handle. Sounds like a 1920s jazz maestro.

Reading the script now.
Glad you like it! I always thought it sounded really cool. What's even more intriguing is that is not just arbitrarily chosen, it has an idea behind it and an entire thought-process actually (and a history). Glad it's noticeable!
So, what did you think of the script? Or was it so bad it sent you screaming out of the room never to return? :grin:
In either case, thanks for reading :thumbsup:
 
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