Dead Inside - Team Peon
- Thread starter Mobie540
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Well done on getting your entry completed and in on time. I didn't doubt it as you've been a long time supporter of the DVXFests with many entries over the years.
SPOILERS BELOW
I found overall the story moved a little slow up until the phone call. I think all of the points you wanted to establish could have occurred much faster.
We know he was bitten by a zombie and is probably on limited time and then we get to his desire to see his son again before it's all over. That's some nice story layered, then it's impossible for him to leave as the zombies arrive.
As opposed to the beginning it was all over quickly and I think there could have been more play there wth the tension.
Again, well done on completing yet another entry.
SPOILERS BELOW
I found overall the story moved a little slow up until the phone call. I think all of the points you wanted to establish could have occurred much faster.
We know he was bitten by a zombie and is probably on limited time and then we get to his desire to see his son again before it's all over. That's some nice story layered, then it's impossible for him to leave as the zombies arrive.
As opposed to the beginning it was all over quickly and I think there could have been more play there wth the tension.
Again, well done on completing yet another entry.