Doc Bernard
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I am putting a cover letter together and sure would like some feedback on it. Give me your thoughts, please.
Cover Letters
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Doc Bernard
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No comments. I wonder if it's because it is so good people are speechless, or so bad people don't want to hurt my feelings.
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Romane19
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Wow! Steven I like it. You're an humble actor. Bengal Productions X SimpleRobb Entertainment.
Just my two cents....
As previously stated (*previously stated where?), I am extremely easy
going,(*add in comma) conscientious, and I take direction very well. All in all, my goal is the same as yours, which is (get rid of "and that") is to make the ("your") production
the very best it can be.
As to my background, I have (add: recently?) been working a few national prime-time shows (as of late *eliminate), so please refer to my resume for further
details. What I offer to you is an actor that can portray technical and professional roles (FF, PD/SWAT, Doctor/RN,
Paramedic/EMT, Military, Special Operations, Agent, etc.) (*Do you want to limit yourself to only these roles?*)
Below is a brief overview of some of the skills I can
authentically perform:
* All in all I think it is very genuine which is good. I am just in an English program at university so this is some stuff I watch out for when writing. Take it with a grain of salt. Good job!
Matt
As previously stated (*previously stated where?), I am extremely easy
going,(*add in comma) conscientious, and I take direction very well. All in all, my goal is the same as yours, which is (get rid of "and that") is to make the ("your") production
the very best it can be.
As to my background, I have (add: recently?) been working a few national prime-time shows (as of late *eliminate), so please refer to my resume for further
details. What I offer to you is an actor that can portray technical and professional roles (FF, PD/SWAT, Doctor/RN,
Paramedic/EMT, Military, Special Operations, Agent, etc.) (*Do you want to limit yourself to only these roles?*)
Below is a brief overview of some of the skills I can
authentically perform:
* All in all I think it is very genuine which is good. I am just in an English program at university so this is some stuff I watch out for when writing. Take it with a grain of salt. Good job!
Matt
Doc Bernard
Indie Arms Member
LOL, just what I needed, an English Major! Well ask for it and you get it! LOL! Thank for the advice, will make some changes.
12quidkidinnit
Active member
It looks good to me. The only thing I'd think about changing is the above. Possibly to something like . . .
Personally I wouldn't cast any doubt in the letter at all. Why would you? If you give them the impression that you may NOT take the role then they will hire someone else.
In my opinion unless you are an Angelina Jolie or Brad Pit you should take whatever exposure you can get providing it isn't harmful to your career. So wording the letter that way would probably work against you.
Change it to: "I would be more than happy to perform these roles" or something like that.
Matt