Contest Week 1 Voting Entry 1

Contest Week 1 Voting Entry 1

  • 1

    Votes: 0 0.0%

  • 2

    Votes: 3 42.9%

  • 3

    Votes: 3 42.9%

  • 4

    Votes: 0 0.0%

  • 5

    Votes: 1 14.3%
  • Total voters
    7
  • Poll closed .
You had a GREAT idea. Your script is not formatted in any way... is hard to follow. I would love this as a short if it were well written.
 
It seems like a really interesting idea, but there is so much disjointed information here. None of the characters are given names so it's hard to follow who is who. I think less details about what the people and rooms look like and more details about what the people do would make this much easier to follow and a better story.
 
Constructive criticism is always a good thing. However, since I'm in the contest I'll withhold any critiques until it's over. JMHO.
 
Really interesting idea, but it's not in script format. This more prose than anything, and it's tough to read when it's in big blocks. Characters don't have any names so it's tough to follow there as well. Also, 1 minute of screentime is approximately 1 page so this should have been 4 pages long.

thanks,
JP
 
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