1st Short Film: KISS

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aedude01

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Ok,
Can't believe I'm actually getting to post my first film on here for you guys to all watch and critique, but anyway... here it is!

The short is called “KISS" and was my first thing I shot with my DVX two years ago in October. Anyway, the plot is a little deranged, but basically, I just threw everything I could at the screen to see what I could do with no budget and my new camera. Let me know what you think.

Since shooting this, I've shot four more films, and quite a few news packages, so while this isn't my latest work, I still want to know what you guys think.

It is here: http://rapidshare.de/files/851011/kiss.rmvb.html
In REAL format.

Directions to Download
Click on the link above, you'll be taken to this free hosting webpage. Scroll down to the bottom and click FREE.

A new page will load and scroll down again (if needed) at the bottom of the page will be a counter that will tell you when your download will appear (usually under 60 seconds). When the link appears, right click (for PC users), and save as. Mac's I think you control click.

The file is around 14mb. The movie runs around 8:30.

Can't wait to hear what you guys think!
FYI, the entire thing was shot with those $10 flood lamps from Ace Hardware, and two light gels.
 
Hi: Here are my thoughts

Hi: Here are my thoughts

The titles are fantastic. Seemed as if i was watching one of the thrillers on the big screen. How did you do that? Could you share?

Any significance to the lightening? - While she's thinking and burning the pictures. Also while she buries the dead body. I can see why you would include that in the latter but not the former.
Establishing the party didn't look right. As independent upcoming film-makers we tend to overlook the need for props (i did similar mistakes in my 1st project)... Or maybe u did this on purpose. The result is that the scene didnt seem real.

2 other scenes that were not well dramatized.. are: When the blonde chick digs.. and when the 2nd girl strangles the blonde chick.

The girl driving in the car, working on the cell phone scene... is fabulous. Nicely done.. everything about the scene is good

The lighting for most scenes were effective. The screenplay is good. Perfect for a short film that you can send for festivals.

Good job. I learned a few things from your project here. Thanks for sharing.
 
Ok guys, sorry for all the problems, I should have some webspace hopefully by the end of the week so i can do a quicktime file...... As far as givemefood's ?'s

1)Titles were done in after effects by simply combining the fast blur effect and the 3d layers option.
2.) Lightining was done just for atmosphere, and i figured since she was burning the photos AFTER she killed him, the storm would probably still be going on.

Thanks for the comments, like i said, I will try to repost in quictime soon.

Lee
 
Content: Too morbid for my tastes.

In terms of cinematography, I thought it was pretty good. My only comments would be that the audio on the voices wasn't so hot - microphone placement is key, and that the scene where the girl was digging the grave for the guy was a bit slow moving for a short film.

The fire lit scenes came out very well.
 
Once again thanks for the comments guys.

Yup, I am aware that the audio was kind of grainy in parts. Mainly because this was my first film I used a single $15 LAV to capture all the dialouge. So considering what was used, I don't think its too bad.

Glad some of you guys are getting to see it at least :-)

Lee
 
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