FINAL TOLL - short w/ HVX200

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dlee_ultra

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I enjoy seeing everyone's work on here, so thought I'd post this. It's a short called Final Toll that I co-directed and DP'd on. The two main actresses (Joanne Spracklen & Lauren Brown) are making a name for themselves in the Central FL area. The other co-director, Bill Clar, wrote the script, which appealed to me because of the smart dialogue in it.

http://vimeo.com/2133670

It was finished earlier this year and has been to 5 film festivals, including Dragon*Con and the FL Music Festival Film Jam. There's also some info/stills on my website:

www.dplproductions.net

The next short I do, I'm going to use a 35mm adapter. Of course, comments are welcome!

donald
 
I liked it. All three of those chicks are pretty hot. It had that teen slasher vibe.
Not wild about the makeup. Especially on the guy. Not the FX makeup, the skin.
Everything else seemed pretty good.
 
I liked it, on a visual stand points the opening looked like day for night, and it didn't really match the actual night shots.

The close up of the girl dieing reminds me of one of my shots,

I did some roto shapes on her eyes and morphed her Pupils out so they looked to be dilating its really a simple effect and it would make her death so much more realistic and creepy

I still enjoyed it, and yes all the girls were hot, I really liked the girl who bought the dagger and the dead girl, the blonde didn't do much for me looks wise.

nice job
 
Very nice, great shots, great mood, kind of predictable, yet still unpredictable ending (had a feeling it was to kill someone, or themselves, just didn't know which or how).

Just very well done, seems like out of a professional feature film.

The thing that bugged me was the pinky. Looked too obvious that his finger wasn't almost severed. Should have either used a prosthetic or not do it at all. Just takes you out.
 
Jon Starr said:
The thing that bugged me was the pinky. Looked too obvious that his finger wasn't almost severed. Should have either used a prosthetic or not do it at all. Just takes you out.
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Maybe I should watch it again, but the stuff with the motorcycle guy didn't make sense to me.

Is it necessary? Wouldn't it be better just to cut it out?

What does it add? seems like it took the story off track.
 
Thanks guys for the comments and input.

Yes, the beginning shots are day-for-night. We were thinking of doing it actually at night but cemeteries have no power sources. We could've used generators but the logistics seemed a bit much and getting permits, etc. We just pre-planned, did some tests, then at dusk shot w/ Joanne. Sometimes there were people actually walking around the cemetery. Tried to keep a low profile.

As for the pinky, we actually had a guy make a prosthetic for it but he couldn't make it to the shoot. His suggestion to attach it didn't work at all, so we did the alternative.

In the script, there wasn't suppose to be shots of the motorcycle guy, just the dagger girl talking about it. But if we did this, most of the short would be mainly talking heads. This was a good way to break it up and visually tell the story.

Most people who watch it have an idea of what might happen but never really predict it all the way. That was the appeal for me of the script.
 
Jon Starr said:
Very nice, great shots, great mood, kind of predictable, yet still unpredictable ending (had a feeling it was to kill someone, or themselves, just didn't know which or how).

Just very well done, seems like out of a professional feature film.

The thing that bugged me was the pinky. Looked too obvious that his finger wasn't almost severed. Should have either used a prosthetic or not do it at all. Just takes you out.
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I'm the writer and co-director.

I hired a friend with FX experience to cast and mold a prosthetic pinky finger. I tried attaching it via spirit gum, but I had no fx experience and couldn't get it to stick. The backup plan was put the blood on the actor's finger.
 
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