I actually wrote 5 1/2 pages for LoveFest (silent film all action and no dialog). The first cut was 14 minutes. Between cutting a whole lot out and ramping the speed up (mimicking 16fps played back at 24fps) I just barely got it down to 6:00, but I'm well aware that the film suffered as a result.
Need to be more careful on my next fest film as somehow I don't think accelerating dialog footage is going to work out too well. (Well, unless I do a drugs film)
This is something you learn as you go I find. Eventually you learn to do it well.
There is no reason why you shouldn't be able to fit 5.5 pages into a five or six minute short. A 5 page script definitely shouldn't have been running at 14 minutes. IMHO.
That's what's great about these Fest's. They make you focus on telling a complete story withing the time limit. Not an easy task.
Mike
I bet it's an issue of not breaking it into paragraphs / skipping lines for every shot. The script was all action. 5 pages of block text describing action could easily run 15 minutes or much, much more.
To get to the 1 minute per page average, which again is an average which works better averaging out over 90 or 120 mins / pages you've gotta be in exactly correct form. Which is not just tabs and margins but also making the script a good vertical read and skipping lines (double space) between every shot / new idea.
So ...
Ledbetter turns the sink's knob but nothing comes out - at
first.
Then the pipes chug, the walls shake, and a single spat of
brown sludge ejaculates from the faucet.
He picks up a nearly empty bottle of bourbon, pours some
over the paste on his toothbrush and gives his teeth a good
once over.
Not ...
Ledbetter turns the sink's knob but nothing comes out - at
first. Then the pipes chug, the walls shake, and a single
spat of brown sludge ejaculates from the faucet. He picks
up a nearly empty bottle of bourbon, pours some over the
paste on his toothbrush and gives his teeth a good once over.
If it takes time to do or time to look at it should take up space on the page, which makes for a clearer, better read that's more like watching a film anyway.