ZFarms Productions Presents "Amore"

Went back into Final Cut Pro, and got rid of the continuity error in the wardrobe (i swear i didn't notice that, and i don't know why). Plus I've been listening to the audio, and clearing it up. It's not perfect yet, but its getting there.
 
This was very entertaining. Audio really needed to be better balanced between cuts but besides that great job. Your actors sounded very natural and did a great job with their roles.
 
I liked the color in both the interior and the exterior, but I was a little taken aback by the sudden change. Obviously, the inside is darker than outside in the sun, but the difference was pretty drastic. To me it actually changed the feel a little. Not trying to beat a dead horse, but I agree with previous posts that the relationship could have been more developed. Part of the problem was that it was so short, but it felt short, almost rushed. Other than a line of dialog in the beginning, there's no development of the female character.

I liked the twist at the end, but if that's what you wanted to end with, more development earlier on would have helped flesh out the story. When you're doing something that's based on a personal experience, it's hard sometimes to change anything from how it happened in your memory, but sometimes it's necessary to better tell the story.

Also, I liked that the actors were age-appropriate. There were no doubts that that they were/could be high schoolers.

Overall an enjoyable and very well shot short. Big kudos to Andrew for the overall look. I would have liked to see a little more of it.
 
I enjoyed the short and the issues have been pretty much pointed out. I read through your production notes and saw that you were putting a lot of work into this and it shows. I too, have already started reworking my entry.
 
Thanks for all the comments guys, I really appreciate it. We ran into some problems throughout the shoot, but we made due. Wish I would've had time to color the film, maybe for the 2nd version though.
 
I liked this short film !

I was especially impressed with the production value in adding atmosphere in the cafeteria; it felt populated and alive.

Overall nicely done.
 
Thought the two side line dude characters did a fine job. The tech issues you know. I find these punchline films kinda odd. Not in a bad way... really it's just a different kind of twist ending. Anyhow, keep it up!
 
Fun! The guy in the green shirt was definitely the best actor. Reminded me of Steve Zahn.

Btw, if I call that number, is that really the rejection hotline? I feel an overwhelming desire to dial that number to find out...
 
i liked this short!

filming the cafeteria was a big plus, you made your film look so much bigger for doing so. and i liked the overall story too, i did kind of see the ending coming, not in the particular way of learning that there is an official rejection hotline - jeez, brutal, man! - but in the sense that she wasn't going out with him. i'm not sure why either...

i agree with what i think kholi said earlier in that the main lead was almost too cool in the beg. i don't think i quite believed he would have a prob asking out a girl. but he was still good. so, not a real problem. i too thought the hoodie wearing kid was the best actor there. he was funny! especially when he came back into frame with his head down. too damn cool. i would've swapped him out for the main, not because of their acting but because of the story.

maybe a quick fix to the three guys outside the school would be to allow the dialogue to run into each other. i mean to say that one kid would speak and then cut to the face of the next kid before that kid stops speaking. give a little spill over. that might make it have a quicker and more natural feel?

i really do like it though and it shows a lot of hard work. how did you film the cafeteria with all the kids in there? cool work!

props for asking that girl out in real life! too funny if she got to see this...
 
Thanks for all the comments Hoz. The extras in the cafeteria were cast/crew that weren't busy at the time, plus a couple of friends that we got to show up. We wanted more, but some people didn't want to be up at 10am.
 
Production values were great on this. As said before, actually having extras in the cafeteria, and making it seem like it might be a high school...woah. Good job. Also, great job on casting. The actors were all pretty good and of course age appropriate. I know how difficult it is finding good actors in that age range and I'm impressed with how you made do.

I just wish this story had a bit more conflict. Sorta feels punch-liney to me. Like, maybe if he went through a lot more to get this girls number, and after all that he thought he finally made it, but then found out it was the rejection hotline. I think that would have brought us all up more and let us feel his dissapointment more so than we currently do.

Anyways, use these guys in more films. I am a fan.
 
Thanks Ryan. The cast goes to school with me at Full Sail and the guy in the red shirt is my roommate also. Great group of guys to hang out with and they're very dedicated to making movies.
 
How are you? I just saw the final cut on youtube... congratulations! you have a movie.

I think that you could still work on the sound, the level is soooo low. Even with headphones, is hard to listen to some dialog. The whole mix needs some work, the jumps between cut and cut are pretty big.

Now... about the story. I would like to see some intro of Steve, when he sees this girl before he meets his friends. And also some time lapse before he calls her. If you want to do the final joke succesfull, give the character some great expectations for that big friday night.

I hope it´s clear... I´m downloading the cut for the fest right now. I hope to see some of that stuff in that version.

Congratulations again.
 
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