"An Orange Rose" by J. Van Auken

Nice work! The acting was pretty good and all the characters were enjoyable. I felt the pacing was a little slow in spots and there were a couple of audio issues.

Still, the story flowed well and I got a few laughs out of it.

Cheers!
 
Hey Guys, great job.

A well executed simple story!

I liked the characters here. I thought that your lead was great. The girl was perfect. The salesman, a bit "out there!" At first, I was totally annoyed with his stereo-typical geekiness but it grew on my as he developed his own character.

And damn, I was ready to punch the guy myself when he came out with that potted plant. I was like, "OMG... that's where this film is going! A political statement!" I don't know what held the lead back from attacking this guy earlier and I actually would like to have seen a bit more inner conflict with him as he held his anger back.

But, NICE punch/transition. I loved that.

I also wanted a "new" look of disbelief at the end when the girl completely cut him off and went on with her own story. The guy had just gone through so much and we saw several looks from him. I wanted one, last fresh look of disgust with this visit. No deal-breaker. Just something that I wanted to throw out there. *** update **** I just went back to see that final scene again. What actually bothers me is that our lead is looking down throughout that final exchange. I just wanted to see a full face shot after this outrageous experience he just had. Just my thoughts.

Nice soundtrack. Really worked for this film.

Great job, guys!

Congrats,

Ted
 
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You had some nice shots. I enjoyed Kirk’s entrance, the shot from the floor, and the punch. The “one of your wives” line was funny. The comedy was cheesy, maybe a bit too cheesy, but I kinda like cheese myself.



Biggest nit, the audio could have used some work.

Overall, I enjoyed this film. i liked how we subtly slide into the point. Thanks for sharing it!
 
He did look like Kumar. Acting was impressive, especially from the girl. The audio could use a little help. I liked the part with the punch. The story didn't do anything for me. I thought for sure he was going to fall in love with the cranky girl.
Keep up the good work though.
 
well, for a simple story, I think the commentary here is great :) I knew the audi thing was comin at me, so I can't be too disappointed about it. For an improvved, one day shoot, I'm glad people are liking it. Keep it comin, guys :)
 
Cute story. I felt like the weird, creepy dude was a little out of place acting-wise. A little over the top. I felt like the actress was a little better handling a "character" in a more natural way.

Audio was kind of all over the place, which ordinarily I don't care too much about, but it was a little distracting here. Fridge hum, odd clicks and pops and the like. A couple of spots where you brought the level WAY up on the goofy guy to hear him, I would have ADRed those.

But a nice film.
 
Hahaha yes another comedy, I have been waiting to see this one.

I really enjoyed it. I thought it was funny, cute, and simple. Yes the audio needed work and I may have opted to go adapterless, but those are nitpicks. Funny acting, good pacing, I enjoyed this one.

My favorite line was when he says this is like the bible, or Koran, of flowers. haha.
 
AN ORANGE ROSE -- I LOL'd. For serious.

No, really I did. Of course they were all the jokes about the race, but I actually found them pretty funny in a good way. I also LOL'd when the dude "arose" from behind him.

It's a comedy, it made me laugh, good job. I'm sure someone already pointed out the audio issues since I'm not the first to post here. So nevermind that. I'll say that it did linger a little too long in the beginning and in the end. In fact, I think that the entire ending after the line "it was behind the counter the whole time." could be cut and it would have the same exact impact. That might be me.

The flowershop guy's part could've actually benefited from speaking clearly. Maybe not so over the top so that when he delivers his funnier lines "Iranian Flowers" it's more of a laugh out loud moment.

So most of it lies with editing, to me. That and fixin' minor technicalities.

I do want to ask what adapter ya used for this.

Funny stuff!
 
I to, enjoyed this film.

Acting was well done also.

The guy rising from behind was hilarious as well Kholi!

Goodluck man,

Robbie
 
Good film...a lot of good timing and I too loved the 'flower bible' line. It was a little over the top but each of the characters were likable and it never felt tiresome. I LOL'ed. Also like the choice of CC. Good job.
 
Kholi - I used the Brevis for the whole shoot.

Someone here brought up the idea of not having used it, which I think might have been a better decision in this case.
 
A question I had:

It's hard for me to see Rose objectively, and gauge how it comes off to most people. So, my question was if anyone had watched it more than once to catch things, or if most people felt like they got it all in a quick view. Not the deepest tale, I know, but I just wonder if it's really just considered standard comedy fare, and doesn't warrant another look. Not that I'm lobbying for it to be seen more, I'm just curious.
 
*spoiler*

I used to know a guy in my small college community who sounded excactly like Kirk, believe it or not. I wanted to punch him too! Aaagh... same mannerisms as well.

:)
 
okay, good film, and im not sure what to say about it exactly but i will try...

funny- the kid popping up from behind. cool. his accent, sort of funny. his dialog- funny at times, but im not the biggest fan of racial humor. the girl behind the counter- she was funny, she was ridiculous, especially at the end.

the lead was okay, i am sure it was not easy to act to the other two. as for the story, it was alright. congrats on your film, thanks.
 
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