"Happy Ending" A Bernie Hipos Film

Hey Gohanto, thanks for that man, I really appreciate it. Yup we had a very long script before and I guess we managed to cut it down to less than 6 minutes.
To Tom, hahaha I didn't notice that lol. 4real is basically the name of our production company in the Philippines, my friend told me maybe we can change it to 4reel as in reel of a film. Hehehe...
To Mark thanks to you, we tried our best to translate it in detail. I'm happy because everyone here is helping each other improve which is really awesome. This is the best forum ever! Cheers to all.
 
First, congratulations on completing your first short film.

Story wise, it was sweet. I wish it had taken place over a shorter period of time and had really focused on the pressure, pain, and loss he felt in having to break up with his true love. More conflict and less phone conversations.

Technically, the sound was a little rough, but I thought you did a good job for your first film.
 
Chris Messineo said:
First, congratulations on completing your first short film.

Story wise, it was sweet. I wish it had taken place over a shorter period of time and had really focused on the pressure, pain, and loss he felt in having to break up with his true love. More conflict and less phone conversations.

Technically, the sound was a little rough, but I thought you did a good job for your first film.
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Hi chris thanks for the compliment, really appreciate it.:)
 
The film was OK. I think the script held this one back. I wanted to be shown the story, but I felt like the dialog was "telling" the story almost like a narration. The emotion level was too mellow. I wanted Gaby to be more in love and more upset and more angry. Same story went for the leading male. I think the story was there, but you need to get the viewer behind the characters or angry with them. Thanks for sharing and good luck on future films!
 
Yeah! We finally have a bilingual entry, I love that!

I agree with the previous poster that when you only have 6 minutes, it's better to set the story in one timeframe.

Now a silly question, where they speaking spanish? It sounded like Spanish to me but they didn't look Spanish.

Keep going!
 
Good job on your first film Bernie. It looks like everybody has pretty much said what I was going to say but I wanted to stop by and leave a comment saying that you're off to a good start. Keep going.
 
Champloo said:
Good job on your first film Bernie. It looks like everybody has pretty much said what I was going to say but I wanted to stop by and leave a comment saying that you're off to a good start. Keep going.
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hey champloo thanks a lot! appreciate it!
 
Hey Bernie, just got to see your film. Nice work.

Your opening sequence was by far my favorite! I enjoyed the cinematography and the color. And you started out with a really nice story filled with conflict.

However, I felt that the rest of the film was forced. The conflict was there but it had to be told to use in words. I would really liked to have witness this conflict.

Nice job on showing your characters 3 years later. Gaby, in particular, looked great as she had "moved on."

There is a nice message here to your film that could have blossomed nicely with some different choices, in my opinion. The writing seemed to repeat itself at the end. I would like to have seen the guy become everything that Gaby had always wanted. I just felt that we were being told this story instead of being shown this story.

Nice job. I am glad that you submitted your film!

-Ted
 
Ted Arabian said:
Hey Bernie, just got to see your film. Nice work.

Your opening sequence was by far my favorite! I enjoyed the cinematography and the color. And you started out with a really nice story filled with conflict.

However, I felt that the rest of the film was forced. The conflict was there but it had to be told to use in words. I would really liked to have witness this conflict.

Nice job on showing your characters 3 years later. Gaby, in particular, looked great as she had "moved on."

There is a nice message here to your film that could have blossomed nicely with some different choices, in my opinion. The writing seemed to repeat itself at the end. I would like to have seen the guy become everything that Gaby had always wanted. I just felt that we were being told this story instead of being shown this story.

Nice job. I am glad that you submitted your film!

-Ted
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hi ted, thanks a lot...that was a very nice review. hope to submit more films in the coming fests...i enjoyed this fest a lot.:dankk2:
 
Hey Bernie, i was just flipping through your thread and I see that this is your FIRST FILM!!!

Wow! I am very impressed. Good for you. You did a very commendable job here.

I certainly look forward to your future work.

Keep it up!

Best,

Ted
 
So it's a love story, but what seperates it from the rest is that it exists in the larger context of the characters' cultures/ethnic identity/so on. I'm sure it was something that you were goin for or at least came about naturally. Anyhow, loved that aspect. You know you have some technical work to do and that will come with time. Just keep making films.
 
Congrats on your first film. It's pretty ambitious due to the scope and number of locations. Most first-timers stick to one location due to fear. I know that's what I did. Ha.

Keep making more. You have a unique voice.
 
Bernie,
Dude, I wish you could see my first attempt......Or maybe I don't, lol.

My step mother is Filipino so I have to show her this, she'll love it. Great job on completing your film as the first couple of attempts I made were pretty much not worth finishing, if ya know what I mean. That is something I definitely can't say about this.

A few technical clean ups could make this a pretty solid little piece, good job.
 
hey guys, thanks for all your great comments. i really don't know what to say, it's really an awesome feeling...

Slimothy said:
My step mother is Filipino so I have to show her this, she'll love it. Great job on completing your film as the first couple of attempts I made were pretty much not worth finishing, if ya know what I mean.
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hey man thanks for that, it's nice to know that your step mom is Filipino, I think she'll be proud if she'll watch it. Thanks again.
 
Most of the images are nice and have a natural unforced feeling to them and the world felt pretty real.

I feel for you with some of your sound problems in the beginning especially and throughout. Gotta fix that with some ADR. Audio is 60% of what you see and much more important to overall perceived quality than video.
Story was ok but not overly interesting.

I appreciated the simplicity and enjoyed it. Great first effort.

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