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I'm writing a script for my digital cinematography class, which is due tomorrow, and I'm about to write the script for it, but I just can't think of a suitable ending. I know how I need the characters to act, but I just can't think of the best way to get it across.
Here's a basic outline of the action.
A business man, Chad, awakes one morning to find out that he has lost his keys to his car. He asks his wife if he can borrow her car to get to work, but for some reason she can't.
So this man calls a taxi and the next time we see him he's in a business district of a big city. As he gets out of the car, a man from UNICEF approaches him asking him to donate some of his money, but the man refuses, and continues to complain about the repercussions of him being late for work.
Next walking his way to the office, he is stopped a light when a former employe stops him, and begins to ask him if there are any open positions at the company since the lay off. Again the main, tries to ignore him and acts as if nothing is happening. The man steps in front of him to confront him again about a position, and Chad just pushes the man aside.
Next, we see Chad at a small paper stand. In front of him a woman stands. The cashier rings up her bill, and the woman makes some excuse of how she is short a 75 cents, so she turns to Chad, and asks if she can borrow the money. Chad, like usual tries to ignore the woman, but at this point the woman is starting right down on him. "Can I borrow some change?" she asks. Meanwhile the cashier tells her he's going to have to ask her to stop aside if she doesn't have enough. Chad refuses to give her any money, and the women walks off in a huff.
Chad finally approaches the stand, and as he is paying for the newspaper, a man runs by and steals his wallet. Chad drops the newspaper and begins to run after the man.
Eventually Chad finds an ally where a few men are standing around a bunch of women's purses and man's wallet. Chad approaches the men and begins to ask for his wallet back. The taunt him and eventually punch him onto the ground, where Chad passes out.
Chad wakes up, wearing a dirtied up white shirt, and slacks. His blazer, and watch are now gone. Chad begins to walk to his office. By this time however he's over an hour late for his meeting and the doors to his office are locked and he's missing his keycard to get into building. He tries to ask numerous people if he can borrow their cell phone, to call his wife, but like the people he refused these people are not too empathetic with his situation.
Alright this is where I'm getting stuck. I want their to be some realization point where perhaps the main character realizes that he can't live his life ignoring other peoples problems. Eventually i would like Chad to be able to help someone somehow, maybe he can give him something he still has on himself which is meaningless to him but could truly help someone else. I'm not entirely sure. Anyone have any ideas or critiques about the story? Thanks guys, I really appreciate it! I should also mention this must be within 6-8 minutes; so any ideas on condensing a bit, would be greatly appreciated.
Here's a basic outline of the action.
A business man, Chad, awakes one morning to find out that he has lost his keys to his car. He asks his wife if he can borrow her car to get to work, but for some reason she can't.
So this man calls a taxi and the next time we see him he's in a business district of a big city. As he gets out of the car, a man from UNICEF approaches him asking him to donate some of his money, but the man refuses, and continues to complain about the repercussions of him being late for work.
Next walking his way to the office, he is stopped a light when a former employe stops him, and begins to ask him if there are any open positions at the company since the lay off. Again the main, tries to ignore him and acts as if nothing is happening. The man steps in front of him to confront him again about a position, and Chad just pushes the man aside.
Next, we see Chad at a small paper stand. In front of him a woman stands. The cashier rings up her bill, and the woman makes some excuse of how she is short a 75 cents, so she turns to Chad, and asks if she can borrow the money. Chad, like usual tries to ignore the woman, but at this point the woman is starting right down on him. "Can I borrow some change?" she asks. Meanwhile the cashier tells her he's going to have to ask her to stop aside if she doesn't have enough. Chad refuses to give her any money, and the women walks off in a huff.
Chad finally approaches the stand, and as he is paying for the newspaper, a man runs by and steals his wallet. Chad drops the newspaper and begins to run after the man.
Eventually Chad finds an ally where a few men are standing around a bunch of women's purses and man's wallet. Chad approaches the men and begins to ask for his wallet back. The taunt him and eventually punch him onto the ground, where Chad passes out.
Chad wakes up, wearing a dirtied up white shirt, and slacks. His blazer, and watch are now gone. Chad begins to walk to his office. By this time however he's over an hour late for his meeting and the doors to his office are locked and he's missing his keycard to get into building. He tries to ask numerous people if he can borrow their cell phone, to call his wife, but like the people he refused these people are not too empathetic with his situation.
Alright this is where I'm getting stuck. I want their to be some realization point where perhaps the main character realizes that he can't live his life ignoring other peoples problems. Eventually i would like Chad to be able to help someone somehow, maybe he can give him something he still has on himself which is meaningless to him but could truly help someone else. I'm not entirely sure. Anyone have any ideas or critiques about the story? Thanks guys, I really appreciate it! I should also mention this must be within 6-8 minutes; so any ideas on condensing a bit, would be greatly appreciated.
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