HorseFilms
Look ma no hands
gwmesler said:
This one doesn't quite go that route, but we have a script that's eerily similar to that. We almost shot that one for the fest, actually.
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This one doesn't quite go that route, but we have a script that's eerily similar to that. We almost shot that one for the fest, actually.
jpbankesmercer
Director Mod
Yours will be one of the first I watch baby.
HorseFilms
Look ma no hands
jpbankesmercer said:
I'll be waiting for yours to hit the server, too, my friend.:beer:
Mark Harris
Pain in the ass
Well my first comment is, that girl is pretty cute and that guy is an ass-hat. You give me her number and I'll treat her right.
Back for more after I watch them all.
Back for more after I watch them all.
HorseFilms
Look ma no hands
desperatecomfort said:
I think so, too.
Michael_Petro
Veteran
desperatecomfort said:
her makeup appeared to be a little runny
.. Nice job Mr H.FilmsReview | POSSIBLE SPOILER ALERT! I watch the movies first time around strictly for enjoyment, second and third for review.
Hey guys, I'm going down alphabetically and guess who's first!
For starters I'd like to say you've got really clean images going on. The compression was good on this one and kind of set the standard for those to follow, for myself. On to the subject matter -- (please do not take this as more than audience review.)
Script - I think that the script could've been worked through a bit more. For what it was, it seemed like the four minutes could've been condensed into two and had a better impact. I also didn't see what the ending was about, either. But I'm sure there's something I missed.
Direction - Not bad at all. Sure you had tight spaces to work with. The bedroom scenes, to me, want to stand out as the strongest.
Acting - Not bad overall. The guy's accent wasn't offensive, either. Pleasant actually. The girl's line "and I'll die" was hilarious. Just kind of stated and it actually worked as comedy relief for me. Not bad.
Cine/Lighting - Pretty even all around. Shadows looked natural for the most part. Nothing to distract me from the content the first watch around. There's one part where I can see a light moving, but had I not I would've never noticed that the eerie green curtain was lit that way. Neat little idea.
Editing - Not the strongest aspect, but not the weakest. There's a cut where you do a push in on the eye that really took me out of it on the first watch. Maybe it was too fast?
Sound - Overall the shortcoming of ... the short? Music was a bit redundant but tolerable, the sound mixing was a little hollow and choppy as well. Though whatever Mic you used wasn't too bad. I didn't hear a lot of ambience going on, just the empty room sound. Sound should be tightened on a re-cut if at all possible.
edit* Special Effects - Not a lot here. The blood looked like blood, though. Was it messy?
Scariest Moments - The part where she's standing at the window. That was actually kinda (wtf) and the moment that I got interested in watching again. The lighting was creepy.
Overall consensus - This is the first time I've seen your work. I might've missed other entries but it wasn't bad at all. I only hope I can achieve something as decent as that. Thanks for giving me something to watch, Horsefilms! And I'm sure you're improving as well.
Hey guys, I'm going down alphabetically and guess who's first!
For starters I'd like to say you've got really clean images going on. The compression was good on this one and kind of set the standard for those to follow, for myself. On to the subject matter -- (please do not take this as more than audience review.)
Script - I think that the script could've been worked through a bit more. For what it was, it seemed like the four minutes could've been condensed into two and had a better impact. I also didn't see what the ending was about, either. But I'm sure there's something I missed.
Direction - Not bad at all. Sure you had tight spaces to work with. The bedroom scenes, to me, want to stand out as the strongest.
Acting - Not bad overall. The guy's accent wasn't offensive, either. Pleasant actually. The girl's line "and I'll die" was hilarious. Just kind of stated and it actually worked as comedy relief for me. Not bad.
Cine/Lighting - Pretty even all around. Shadows looked natural for the most part. Nothing to distract me from the content the first watch around. There's one part where I can see a light moving, but had I not I would've never noticed that the eerie green curtain was lit that way. Neat little idea.
Editing - Not the strongest aspect, but not the weakest. There's a cut where you do a push in on the eye that really took me out of it on the first watch. Maybe it was too fast?
Sound - Overall the shortcoming of ... the short? Music was a bit redundant but tolerable, the sound mixing was a little hollow and choppy as well. Though whatever Mic you used wasn't too bad. I didn't hear a lot of ambience going on, just the empty room sound. Sound should be tightened on a re-cut if at all possible.
edit* Special Effects - Not a lot here. The blood looked like blood, though. Was it messy?
Scariest Moments - The part where she's standing at the window. That was actually kinda (wtf) and the moment that I got interested in watching again. The lighting was creepy.
Overall consensus - This is the first time I've seen your work. I might've missed other entries but it wasn't bad at all. I only hope I can achieve something as decent as that. Thanks for giving me something to watch, Horsefilms! And I'm sure you're improving as well.
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HorseFilms
Look ma no hands
Thanks, Kholi! I appreciate the feedback.
Mark Johnson
The Dude Abides
Really enjoyed your film, Horse. I especially love the lead's delivery of "It better be a f*ckin burglar". Poifect! If he doesn't live in a trailer park he is a damn good actor!
For me the stark piano sound track really worked ... for awhile. It evoked the haunting sense I had when I first heard Musica Ricercata played as a single note track in Kubrick's Eyes Wide Shut. However, by the halfway point I found the phrase had become simply repetitive so that it lost the power of illuminating the film.
My favorite scene is when the female lead is at the sink simply standing and not responding. To me it replicated the strong sense of unease I felt when I saw Blair Witch Project and the actor is standing, back to the camera, nonresponsive in the creepy house. Although I didn't really buy much of Blair, that one scene has always stayed with me as being particularly evocative. I suppose it also resonated because Jack has a very similar dynamic in Rekindled when the actress appears standing facing the wall without answering Marty, who calls out her name repeatedly.
Thanks for some wonderful imagery.
For me the stark piano sound track really worked ... for awhile. It evoked the haunting sense I had when I first heard Musica Ricercata played as a single note track in Kubrick's Eyes Wide Shut. However, by the halfway point I found the phrase had become simply repetitive so that it lost the power of illuminating the film.
My favorite scene is when the female lead is at the sink simply standing and not responding. To me it replicated the strong sense of unease I felt when I saw Blair Witch Project and the actor is standing, back to the camera, nonresponsive in the creepy house. Although I didn't really buy much of Blair, that one scene has always stayed with me as being particularly evocative. I suppose it also resonated because Jack has a very similar dynamic in Rekindled when the actress appears standing facing the wall without answering Marty, who calls out her name repeatedly.
Thanks for some wonderful imagery.
HorseFilms
Look ma no hands
Mark Johnson said:
Thanks a lot, Mark! Yes, the music is what happens when you don't hire someone else to do it and you get stuck trying to make it work on your own.
Blaine
Mr. Hollywood
Warning: Spoilers
Warning: Spoilers
Horse, thanks for that. I have always liked your lighting... The images are nice, clean and interesting.. The only negatives for me would be the ending...not sure what happened there. Is someone having a dream or does she off him. I agree with Mark about the music. Of course, you already know that.
I'm going to definitely watch this again. It struck me as a teaser for something larger and I'd like to see that "something larger." :thumbsup:
Warning: Spoilers
Horse, thanks for that. I have always liked your lighting... The images are nice, clean and interesting.. The only negatives for me would be the ending...not sure what happened there. Is someone having a dream or does she off him. I agree with Mark about the music. Of course, you already know that.
I'm going to definitely watch this again. It struck me as a teaser for something larger and I'd like to see that "something larger." :thumbsup:
Charli
cool little "title"
Script: It has a beginning but not middle then it ends.
Direction: I wasn't moved by it but I wasn't turned off by it.
Acting: Not enough happened to rate this. Halfway through the film it's a no
brainer for the actors.
Audio: Didn't have any problems hearing anything.
Editing: Straight forward.
Cine/light: I actually liked the shadows.
Score: Fine in beginning, but also like the plot, it had no middle or end.
OVERALL: Your beginning lasted half of the story, you don't have that luxury
in a 6 minute short to establish backstory. You need to get in quicker so that
by page 3-4 you are jumping into the conclusion. The more dead space (no
dialogue) that you have within a page, the slower the pace.
Direction: I wasn't moved by it but I wasn't turned off by it.
Acting: Not enough happened to rate this. Halfway through the film it's a no
brainer for the actors.
Audio: Didn't have any problems hearing anything.
Editing: Straight forward.
Cine/light: I actually liked the shadows.
Score: Fine in beginning, but also like the plot, it had no middle or end.
OVERALL: Your beginning lasted half of the story, you don't have that luxury
in a 6 minute short to establish backstory. You need to get in quicker so that
by page 3-4 you are jumping into the conclusion. The more dead space (no
dialogue) that you have within a page, the slower the pace.
HorseFilms
Look ma no hands
Thanks, Blaine. Yeah, the ending was unfortunate. I was planning to get another shot or two when we originally did it, but somehow ended up forgetting (could it be that we were all hammered?). I would've reshot, but I didn't want to put Allison through the blood shower again. I did my best to save it in the edit, but I'm not a very good editor.
Edgen
Veteran
man, I really enjoyed the movie. I dug the actor's performance, but ya know.. it was the music that really pushed this movie down.
I would highly consider the possibility after the fest to have someone score it.. (hint hint) The piano was just annoying and reminded me of a kid's toy. It was probably just better off without music all together.
Otherwise, nice flick. There were some pretty tense moments.
/j
I would highly consider the possibility after the fest to have someone score it.. (hint hint) The piano was just annoying and reminded me of a kid's toy. It was probably just better off without music all together.
Otherwise, nice flick. There were some pretty tense moments.
/j
HorseFilms
Look ma no hands
Charli said:
We had a beginning and an end?! Sweet!! I thought all we had was middle!!
-Allison Bluhm, screenwriter
jpbankesmercer
Director Mod
Acting: Good.
Script: It did loose me a little, ending?
Direction: Nice shot choice, blocking.
Music: Kill that pianist!
Editing: Smooth.
Lighting: Strongest point, creepy, nice bathroom set-up, you KNOW I love your shadow work dude; you are a great D.P. with your own style. Created a solid overall atmosphere. Blood looked slick.
Loved: The T.V/ Snowman shot, framing was superb WOW! Flickering lights, “There better be a ****ing burglar out there”-Class.
Hated: Handheld shot’s of house, sorry just didn’t work for me, the music.
Overall: Horror is your business and business is good. Well-done mate.
Top job Horse, you gotta do a full on slasher.
Script: It did loose me a little, ending?
Direction: Nice shot choice, blocking.
Music: Kill that pianist!
Editing: Smooth.
Lighting: Strongest point, creepy, nice bathroom set-up, you KNOW I love your shadow work dude; you are a great D.P. with your own style. Created a solid overall atmosphere. Blood looked slick.
Loved: The T.V/ Snowman shot, framing was superb WOW! Flickering lights, “There better be a ****ing burglar out there”-Class.
Hated: Handheld shot’s of house, sorry just didn’t work for me, the music.
Overall: Horror is your business and business is good. Well-done mate.
Top job Horse, you gotta do a full on slasher.
Lingothree
Well-known member
Was someone poking fun at our accents earlier, yah?
Good work. I'll have to agree that it didn't feel like a fully fleshed out story, though. At the end, I felt like I had missed something. Did whatever was on the TV screen at the beginning have some sort of meaning to be revealed at the end?
I liked the shot with the shadow of the blinds on the wall/door.
The fact that I could see the blood all over the woman's back but the man didn't notice until she turned around kind of threw me - what are your thoughts on that?
Overall, I think your cinematography was good except the lighting really could've used a little more umph. Editing was good, too. The score could have been fancied up a tad, as you know. Acting was good, too - both actors were very believable.
Good work - I look forward to seeing more from you!
Good work. I'll have to agree that it didn't feel like a fully fleshed out story, though. At the end, I felt like I had missed something. Did whatever was on the TV screen at the beginning have some sort of meaning to be revealed at the end?
I liked the shot with the shadow of the blinds on the wall/door.
The fact that I could see the blood all over the woman's back but the man didn't notice until she turned around kind of threw me - what are your thoughts on that?
Overall, I think your cinematography was good except the lighting really could've used a little more umph. Editing was good, too. The score could have been fancied up a tad, as you know. Acting was good, too - both actors were very believable.
Good work - I look forward to seeing more from you!
penfever
Well-known member
334
334
Alphabetically 1st = 1st listed = 1st viewed. Nice one, guys.
Well, this was a nice way to start out a brand new DVXFest. A solid, collected piece of work that respects its predecessors without completely emulating them.
The acting was pretty good. I think (as is often the case in micro-budget films) audio hurt performance quite a bit. There's so little gravity to the writing and the dialogue when there's that electronic hum in the background and the noise levels don't match.
In general, audio needed more attention here. 50 percent of viewer experience is audio, and it's the least noted 50 percent to boot. The writing was dragged down by mediocre recording, but the lines weren't half bad - at least the story wasn't talky.
Visually, the cutting merged smoothly with the cinematography to create some nice, striking transitions; I'm thinking in particular of the opening sequence and the opening of the white door to the kitchen.
The ending lacks punch - I think again, it's a lack of attention to audio. It's cliched, but a strangled cry, or some note of distress in the hero's voice, would have done wonders for the resolution. The bloody hand alone wasn't scary enough - especially since it was shot from so far away. That's usually a shot that's done in close-up - restricting the field of perception makes us much more afraid of what we can't see (and therefore, don't know).
A+ effort, thanks for your film. I enjoyed it.
-Ben
334
Alphabetically 1st = 1st listed = 1st viewed. Nice one, guys.
Well, this was a nice way to start out a brand new DVXFest. A solid, collected piece of work that respects its predecessors without completely emulating them.
The acting was pretty good. I think (as is often the case in micro-budget films) audio hurt performance quite a bit. There's so little gravity to the writing and the dialogue when there's that electronic hum in the background and the noise levels don't match.
In general, audio needed more attention here. 50 percent of viewer experience is audio, and it's the least noted 50 percent to boot. The writing was dragged down by mediocre recording, but the lines weren't half bad - at least the story wasn't talky.
Visually, the cutting merged smoothly with the cinematography to create some nice, striking transitions; I'm thinking in particular of the opening sequence and the opening of the white door to the kitchen.
The ending lacks punch - I think again, it's a lack of attention to audio. It's cliched, but a strangled cry, or some note of distress in the hero's voice, would have done wonders for the resolution. The bloody hand alone wasn't scary enough - especially since it was shot from so far away. That's usually a shot that's done in close-up - restricting the field of perception makes us much more afraid of what we can't see (and therefore, don't know).
A+ effort, thanks for your film. I enjoyed it.
-Ben