My first mock-up poster.

U

USLatin

Panamaniac
I am working on my first mock-up for a feature we will shoot this winter. I have a concept, well a few, and I am trying to throw some stuff together. Only have an hour or so into this, well... maybe I don't work that fast, but I defenitely will to ten times better I promise! :)

This is what I did from downloaded pictures and little time, I will later shoot the pieces in the real environment or take my time to create them right... OK, let's get to work... help is MUCH appreciated.

1st ROUGH draft:
_ the layout is horrible so far and admittedly so my weakest link in past projects, please help
_ I think I might go for the night look, any ideas other tricks to use besides blue tones?
_ for the final AUGER, I think I might shoot our real prop and add the blood later with http://www.project09.com/tutorials/photoshop/3d-tentacles/
_ the SMOKE... it is hard to see... (black smoke below the water) not it works at all
_ log line is a temporary one to mock up with
_ TITLE font... maybe thin the letters out?
_ LOG fonts... well I should look for a clearer font for the log line right?

EDIT: It is SO tough to use the auger, with blood and NOT make it look slasher... I think maybe I have to done down the blood? WAY down? I want to use the specificity of the auger cause I bet people who ice fish will find it hard not to rent it if they saw that being used... but I need some help to make this work without ruining the initial perception. Please help if you have any ideas.

1224194101.jpg
1224195347.jpg


1224201551.jpg



1224190391.jpg
 
Last edited:
very cool, man.
If you add a little water ripple down at the bottom, it'll help sell that ice break.
cant wait to see the movie, dude!
 
thanks man! I'll try that right now!


BTW, I fixed the size to 8.5 x 11 but I still don't know where to put the title... the horizon and mountains are messing me up.
 
OK, so I spent a like 10 minutes looking for a water texture... you'd think it would be easy to find, but nope. So I used one of the built in ones... small difference but it certainly helps.

Hey! Hoe about footsteps on the snow?!?! to fill in the negative space without making it too busy? Maybe walking away from the Auger and away along the left side of the frame?
 
_ Added some of the snow that the auger would have kicked up
_ Moved the bottle around

Oh... I'v never done that before. How do you use a picture as a texture?
 
Looks pretty good man. It may be kind of cool to have some of the text almost frozen looking in crackling ice?
 
Yea, I am going for that... just posted an other that ties in the blood better but it also has white on it... do you mean for the title? I was going to try to add more of a frost with the internal glow but couldn't dial it in... if I can't get it right I could do it manually.

EDIT: Here it is... not the crackle but it does look frosted. I like it best with the red log line... what do you guys think?

1224202100.jpg


1224202224.jpg
 
Last edited:
OK, here is what I have, not with the corrected credits the others were just dragged over form my last DVD sleeve.

EDIT: The title was too white, a little darker may not look as frosted but it balances out the colors top to bottom.

1224206179.jpg




1224205594.jpg
 
Last edited:
I was really confused for quite a while, on what was going on down at the bottom. I later figured out that I am seeing a cross section of the ice, and in turn, half of the hole dug by the power tool.

I'm not sure why it took me so long to figure that out. Perhaps it is the perspective... or just me having a 'moment' of stupidity. To clarify, it looked like it was additive, not subtractive. Meaning I didn't see a hole, but rather a bump. Am I making sense?
 
You are making absolute sense. My father also had that issue... the problem being that it is all forced... I had to adjust perspective for everything and frankly didn't finish doing it right cause this is just a mock-up. The background picture was something like 400 x 500 pixels... so I didn't feel like putting a whole lot of time into it. (not that it didn't take me a while)

Sorry if I gave you a headache. :D

I would shoot the actual auger on the lake then spend a lot more time creating the cross-section... maybe I'll cut the ice past the hole and have a real hole... that might be better.
 
My $.02:

1. Move the ice cross section/auger up higher. It's the visual punchline to the "fun and games" line, so it needs to tie together better visually.

2. I'm assuming the "fun and games" line is a tagline and not a subtitle. Currently, it is laid out like a subtitle. I would separate it just a little bit from the title and change the font to a more traditional one, probably a serif font. As is, you have two distressed fonts competing against each other.

3. I'd make "it is" in the tagline "it's" as it's more conversational.

Dig the poster overall. Can I bill for this time. :beer:
 
Ryan, one more thing... there is no common lighting source for that section... the light is coming from 4 different points and one completely made up. :)

Jason... that might be very interesting... having most of the poster submerged might have a good distressed (drowning in your emotions symbolism) feel to it... I'll give that a try.

Maybe have the tag line in the water. What do you think?

JasonFox said:
Can I bill for this time. :beer:
Click to expand...

Do you mean if you can bill me for posting? If that's what you are saying I could send you two pennies in an envelope. :beer:
 
I just skimmed this thread really quickly so I hope I'm not stepping on any toes but your images are so fun I had to throw something together. Maybe it will give you some ideas...? Looking forward to hearing more about this project!

1224222224.jpg
 
Last edited:
I had the same problem as Ryan. I didn't get the perspective. I am wondering why you need the cross section? Doesn't the bloody auger and the hole say it all? Also, what is the object on the horizon by the ES in LAKES? Is that a house with the lights on? I can't tell. I agree with Jason on the typography. I would also move the whole title and tag line down away from the horizon line. Feels like it needs some breathing room. Looks good otherwise. JMO.
 
Well after Jared's mine looks like a crammed mosh-pit. :)
No worries man! I think you did a great job, very clean...

I am thinking about the cross section because of an aspect of the movie. Getting curious? I tried to keep the blood to a minimum because this will end up being a PG-13... we should be able to get it PG. Nevertheless the blood tells you about the movie and it isn't unwarranted at all. The little bright house thingy is going to be a bar called Zorbaz, also an important aspect of the movie. http://images.google.com/imgres?imgurl=http://www.ranlayracing.com/012608%252027%2520Zorbaz.jpg&imgrefurl=http://www.ranlayracing.com/1301cameronlake.htm&h=600&w=800&sz=91&hl=en&start=1&um=1&usg=__Yy8lyCyQek26kbd7dPuzkuDBWag=&tbnid=wx70JDfRqfOoGM:&tbnh=107&tbnw=143&prev=/images%3Fq%3Dzorbaz%2Bdetroit%2Blakes%26ndsp%3D21%26um%3D1%26hl%3Den%26client%3Dfirefox-a%26rls%3Dorg.mozilla:en-US:eek:fficial%26sa%3DN It will look like a shining beacon or an oasis in the middle of the frigid winter. The auger is just too cool of a death weapon to pass up... :) but the hole on the ice with a little blood placed correctly might be the way to go... and the actual auger might be too specific or otherwise too much for many... I was thinking about including the ice house too... but a tent type of ice house which will also be featured.

I am counting on the actual pictures being ten times cleaner than my blown up 400 x 500 background, or 40 x 40 bar that I got off the web.. even the water was something like 150 x 200... so they lack depth which makes it feel ten times more crammed than what I already made it. But Jared brings up an excellent point with the poster... less is more, 90% of the time. I really can't wait to get those dang pictures to see what it looks like...

I think I am going to ask you Jared for that picture please! I'll delete the ice house, a lot of the blood, throw in a better auger, make it night time, add a better bar and test out some fonts... that is a perfect picture... you can tell there is a hill, but barely... and that's just how it is out there.

Oh! And I have to agree... the visuals are so freaggin cool I ended up writing a feature out of one simple idea. And it ain't half bad! :thumbsup:
 
Last edited:
nah... I'll just use yours , if you don't mind, but now that you made a clean one it saves me the hassle and it is very nice.... I'll just take out some of the blood and add the auger to it later... I wish I were up there already to shoot the one I mocked up... I am completely convinced now Jared, thanks to you, that the font for the title is just way too complicated.. and so is the one for the logline... after looking at the simplistic font you chose I tried messing with mine and it just didn't work any more.

I guess pictures should tell the story, not your fonts. :thumbsup:


EDIT: OK, Jared... wake up man! :) gimme that picture please :) OR, just go ahead and take some of the snow away and add an auger if you feel like it. I think it will be a great image to use at this point if I can make it higher resolution.
 
Last edited:
You must log in or register to reply here.
Back
Top