DVX100A Short on YouTub

[mikegrasso]

This is a Short I shot for a buddy of mine.

http://youtube.com/watch?v=DUkNkMdSlkg

[Kyle Stebbins]

hate youtube compression... but thats alright.

the intro credits did not flow well with the footage used. it didn't feel organic enough, just jolty and amateurish. also, you could color correct this a bit more. there were some funny lines ("the zone to moan") however i felt your talent (the actors) didn't completely do what was asked of them... to me, they didn't sell any of their lines.

i think for the cop scene, it might've been funnier if instead of the guy in the passenger seat saying "it's that time of the month" if the driver was trying so hard to memorize the line "we swerved to miss an opossum" that the second the cop opens her mouth to say "good even-" "WE SWERVED TO MISS AN OPOSSUM!!!!!!!"
followed by a moment of awkward silence and then cut to a shot of them in the back of the cop car.

color correct this, man! it looks so flat!! (that could be youtube, though)
-kyle s